Title for Hero Story needs help, please

[Laura Barker]

@negeen-dargahi @halle-eavelyn @kent-littlejohn @anthony-simonie

Hello!  This is my current title for my Hero Story:

How EMBRACING CHANGE taught me how to overcome LOSING NEARLY EVERYTHING (INCLUDING MY LIFE) to ACHIEVE PHENOMENAL SUCCESS DOING WHAT I LOVE MOST – HELPING PEOPLE!

Problems I need help with:

1. It is too long
2. It doesn’t tie into helping my target audience – insurance brokers and company owners

I feel like “helping people” is just way too vague to have any real meaning! What I do is help companies and brokers both to improve their bottom line by protecting and empowering the employees.  I can’t seem to come up with anything concise or that has any kind of a punch with it. I really appreciate your feedback and suggestions on this!

Thanks!

[n d]

Hi @laura-barker, how about starting with the bad and ending with the good. Such as:

Why LOSING NEARLY EVERYTHING (INCLUDING MY LIFE) _______And How YOU Can ________.

^ Kind of how Kent has his.

I do like yours, but I feel it can be more powerful. Make a mental list of other ways your story can help someone (including helping others).

 

[Laura Barker]

@negeen-dargahi  @halle-eavelyn – what do you think of this for my Hero Story title?  I like it MUCH better than anything else I have come up with.

I am thinking about using Fiverr to create a whiteboard animation for the beginning of part 2.  I want it to show in 30 seconds my life up until “IT” happened.  What do you think?

How I overcame losing nearly everything (including my LIFE) to launch 2 successful businesses doing what I love most – Helping People – and how you can do the same (without the pain).

Which words would you put in caps?

Thanks!

Laura

 

 

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