Tagline Review

[Eric Calciano]

Hi @negeen-dargahi!

I was going through my profile with my business partner, and he didn’t like my original tagline. Could you give your opinion between these 2 and the reason why you prefer one versus the other?

Version 1:

Want to ATTRACT TOP Talent For YOUR Business With Premier Benefits?  ☆ I can help! ☆ ☞ Message Me!

Version 2:

Premier Insurance Broker | Want to ATTRACT TOP TALENT For Your Business With Benefits? ⭐ I can help! ☞ Message Me!

Thanks!

[Halle Eavelyn]

The 1st one is better because it’s all about THEM! Premier Insurance Broker is about YOU and it’s right up front. Make sense?  Talent should be capitalized in the first one as well.

Who won the debate?

[Eric Calciano]

Hi @halle-eavelyn,

Thank you for the feedback! I was for Version 1 and Jeff was for Version 2, so I guess I win 🙂

 

Do you think I should include anything in the Version 1 that says insurance? Jeff was concerned that just saying benefits might be too vague for the potential client to understand just through the headline.

 

[Halle Eavelyn]

How about: Premier Insurance Benefits? That sounds like it will do the trick.

Glad you won, @eric-calciano, LOL

[Eric Calciano]

@halle-eavelyn

Thanks! haha

I think that will do the trick!

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