Sue Pantages’ 30 sec infomercial

[Sue Pantages]

@halle-eavelyn @negeen-dargahi @kent-littlejohn

Please review verbiage for my 30 second infomercial.  Comments appreciated.

Thanks! Sue

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Hi there, @susan-sue-pantages!! This is a FANTASTIC start – I just had a few tiny tweaks. I’d love for you to introduce yourself in the middle of your message. Lastly, it’s a little too focused on you and less on them. You can fix this by putting the focus more on how you can help them and less on personal stories.

Here’s an easy outline to plug in your content:

How about you start off asking up to 3 POWERFUL pain point questions…

 

Are you WANTING _________?
Do you NEED __________?

Want __________?

 

(after you ask 3 questions)

 

If you answered ‘YES’ to those questions, you came to the right place!

Hi, I’m _______ and I am a ____________ helping clients with _________.

(2-5 sentences saying HOW exactly you plan to help / how you serve your clients)

(you can add 1-2 more sentences about why they should work with you or maybe a motivating 1 liner to get them excited)

If you want _______________ then message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit.

 

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