Second Profile Review

[Ann Dempsey]

https://www.linkedin.com/in/ann-dempsey-1087b8177/

I will appreciate any help with this!  Thanks!! Ann Dempsey

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Hi @ann-dempsey! Nice job revising!

Did you email Lindsey about your background image?? Please do so if you haven’t already.

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline:

When you add “& with zero stress” at the end of your headline, it breaks the flow. Message Me should be what they see at the end.

Please use this by copying and pasting:

Want to BUY Property In Beautiful Coastal Georgia?☆ EXPERT Realtor Helping Clients Find The Best Deals☆☞MSG Me!

Summary:

You’ve got some GREAT content but… the format is a little all over the place. There are too thick of paragraphs and there’s still too much about you and your background than on them.

I love your introduction, though.

Here’s what I want you to do:

COPY THIS PROFILE SUMMARY BELOW:

https://www.linkedin.com/in/jennifer-harris-aa0487119/

I want you to copy the ENTIRE summary and paste it in your LinkedIn Summary slot and then add your own information. The reason I want you to do this is that the format (the spaces between points) is what I want you to have. This will help your readers go through your sales letter efficiently.

Nice job taking action 🙂

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