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Here is again: https://www.linkedin.com/in/jan-h-goldberg/. Improved but is it perfection? Your feedback is welcomed!
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Hi @jan-goldberg! SO proud of you for taking my feedback! Below are my comments to your revisions:
MUCH better background image!
Have you been thinking about new profile photos, yet? This is a must.
Headline:
I realized that there is a break in the headline that doesn’t flow. I fixed it for you, below. Just copy and paste.
Want Beautiful AND Healthy Skin WITHOUT The Use Of Drugs Or Surgery?⭐Premiere NE Ohio Esthetician!⭐👉 Message Me!
About Section:
I want you to add “Do” in front of the “You” that you have in your pain point questions because if you don’t you’re just assuming and you want to instead ask.
Here are your questions revised.
Is your complexion looking DULL and AGED? Are you finding more and more excessive wrinkles and fine lines? Do you SUFFER from sun damaged skin, acne, rosacea, psoriasis or eczema?
If this sounds like YOU…
I can help YOU achieve healthy and beautiful skin!
The rest looks great, Jan!!
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