Review of LinkedIn profile

[Roger Jarnigan]

Good day Negeen,

any updates on my linked in updates I submitted about 7 days ago. I made some changes per your advice and updated inlarhing my photo, changing my sales letter added to my featured etc. also what are my next steps?

[n d]

Hi @roger-jarnigan, I didn’t see a request come in for another review.

Based on my previous feedback on your About section, I would like you to fix the capitalization on every word (soley for grammar reasons).

This sentence is cut short and has your headline in it:

I Help People with Downsizing Their Home. Want to Sell Your Home Fast, With ZERO Stress & At Top Dollar? ☆ I am an Expert and Work with People 55 yrs. or Older. ☆

Change to:

I help clients  55 years+ like YOU downsize their homes.

Fix this sentence – it is a run-on and also i removed the capitalized letters and the & symbol:

I allow YOU to Focus on Your Family & Their Needs While I Navigate to Guide the Processes of Getting Your Home Ready to Sell & SOLD Quickly. While Working Within Your Time Frame and Needs.

TO:

I allow YOU to focus on your family and their needs while I navigate to guide the processes of getting your home ready to sell. Your house will be SOLD quickly and within your desired time frame.

(Roger, please do this will all other sentences ^^ fix the capitalization and read the sentences out loud so that when you’re writing them, they don’t come to an abrupt halt.)

If you can find my previous review, there is more information on my feedback.

Everything remaining, once you’ve made those changes, looks good for you to move forward.

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