REVIEW LINKEDIN PROFILE

[Damian Klinger]

Hello,

 

I just finished Lesson 2 and it said to submit my linkedin URL for review. Please let me know if any changes need to be made or any improvements to provide more traffic to my page.

http://www.linkedin.com/in/damianklinger

 

 

Best,

Moriah

[n d]

Hi @mariah-six – nice job taking massive imperfect action on your profile! Below is my feedback:

Would you be able to turn your profile photo into color and zoom in more?? The black and white is making it difficult to see your faces clearly. Also, once you get a color photo, send it to our graphic designer, Lindsey, and she will add a white background to make it more professional.

You also need a background banner image. I’d also like you to email our graphic designer and tell her a little about your field of business and she can create something better!

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline:

Good start!! It still needs a little bit of cleaning up. How about filling out this template:

Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞Message Me!

• When you’re adding in “to learn about our JETCARD Promotion” it’s not something that would lead people to message, so really utilize the pain point aspect.

Summary:

There needs to be better information and better organization to lead them effortlessly through your sales letter. 

Check out these profiles below and I would look back through the lesson:

https://www.linkedin.com/in/elois-fuller-9b033723/

https://www.linkedin.com/in/carl-unruh-b3598329/

Pro Tip to save time: please refer to these profiles from other realtors in the program. Copy the FORMAT/outline and pay attention to the way they lead you through their profile.

They detail HOW they help their clients, WHO they work with, etc. because right now you’re needing a lot more information.

Please make sure you watch Halle’s video called: “BENEFITS MARKETING and BENEFITS MARKETING II videos in the Transformational Business Strategy module (bottom middle module on your MAIN DASHBOARD – turquoise with a bullseye) video index is to the right of the video window, in alphabetical order.

There’s far too much emphasis in here on YOU and not enough on THEM – these videos will help you see why it’s important to make it so much more about them!

You could start your summary off asking 3 short and sweet and POWERFUL pain point questions!

Call to action:

If you’re ready for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

Please tag me after you make the necessary revisions! 🙂

[Damian Klinger]

Thank you @negeen-dargahi ! I have made some updates.. let me know 😀

 

i have reached out to lindsey.

[n d]

Hi @mariah-six! Thank you for letting me know!

I’m glad you’re looking into getting a new profile photo and background image. Lindsey is pretty fast so hopefully, she sends those over to you soon!

Headline:

This looks good but it was super loud so I fixed it down below so it was easier to read!

Want A Discounted Private Jet WITHOUT Being Charged Additional Fees? ☆ Your PRIVATE Aviation Specialist Helping Clients With A Seamless Private Jet Experience ☆☞Message Me!

About Section:

Your first 2 sentences are the most important and right now, your first paragraph is a call to action. Your call to action should be at the very end of your sales letter.

I encourage you to start off your About section by asking 3 powerful and short pain point questions your clients would relate with such as:

TIRED of waiting at the airport for hours with crowded seats with not enough leg room?

Want ______ but _______?

NEED _______?

Essentially…

My team and I help clients like YOU _________.

[ talk about how your services work and why they should choose you for this experience]

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You HAVE good info, it just needs to be better organized.

If you USE Kent’s profile outline, that will not only help you organize points but it will help you save time!

https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/

Once you’ve made those changes, let me know and i’ll take another look 🙂

 

[Damian Klinger]

Thank you for the help!!

 

Check this out 😀 @negeen-dargahi

[n d]

Hi @mariah-six, WOW your message is so much stronger! I actually know what your business is about 😉

Please remove the dashes, as this is a sales letter*

Please still fix your profile photo and banner image! Very important.

Other than that – you’re good to go 🙂

Awesome work!

 

[Damian Klinger]

I think we should be all set now!

 

@negeen-dargahi

[n d]

Hi @mariah-six, LOVE the banner image. Your profile photo needs to be at eye level – right now i’m seeing way too much neck and chin.

You look great but i’d like you to have a photo where the camera is at eye level.

Good work!

 

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