Profile Shamayah for Review

[Shamayah Neveling]

Hi,

Would appreciate your feedback on my profile: https://www.linkedin.com/in/shamayah/

The header needs to be changed. Working on that.

Thanks,

Shamayah

@alison-liddic

@anthony-simonie

@kent-littlejohn

@matt-barcus

@negeen-dargahi

@tony-liddic

[n d]

Hi @shamayah-neveling – a really nice job on your profile accelerator!

Background Photo:

I don’t feel your background image really depicts what your field of business is. Please email Lindsey@coredm – tell her about your field of business and have her create a new background image for you.

Headline:

Yes, this needs a little tweaking. Try:

How about something like:

⭐Ready To Be KNOWN In Your Industry As a Bestselling Author- WITHOUT Losing Valuable Time? ⭐Helping YOU ____ PM me!

You could put (succeed) in the _______.

Summary:

The summary is really good.

Try not to randomly capitalize the first letter of every word, if it’s not needed. Like in this sentence:

“Let Me Help You Become Known as the Authority in Your Industry”

Your profile would really benefit if you said exactly what you do in the first few sentences AND then dived into the questions. Like:

WHAT I DO IN A FEW WORDS:

I help __________.

Essentially…

(and then add how your current summary starts).

Everything else looks super!

[Shamayah Neveling]

Thanks @negeen-dargahi.

Implemented some of your suggestions.

Changing the headline to: Ready to Be Known in Your Industry as a Bestselling Author – without losing valuable time? Helping you succeed. PM me. doesn’t really make sense to me. They don’t want to necessarily be known as a bestselling author. They want to become a bestselling author, so they become known as the expert.

I could change it to:

1. ⭐ Want to Become a Bestselling Author, Grow Your Practice and Impact More Lives – Without Stress & Frustration? ⭐ PM me
2. ⭐ Want to Become a Bestselling Author, Grow Your Practice and Impact More Lives – Without Losing Valuable time? ⭐ PM me

 

 

 

[n d]

Hi @shamayah-neveling – both of those headlines look great! Nice work.

For choosing which headline to use:

Depending on your perfect client and their pain points, that should help when choosing if they get frustrated/ stressed or fear losing valuable time.

I personally like #2

[Shamayah Neveling]

Can more people of the team give me feedback please? I would like more than one viewpoint.

Edited my profile:

https://www.linkedin.com/in/shamayah/

Thanks so much!

 

@alison-liddic

@anthony-simonie

@kent-littlejohn

@matt-barcus

@negeen-dargahi

@tony-liddic

[n d]

Hi @shamayah-neveling, both @amanda-hendrickson and I are the ones that solely provide feedback on the profile accelerator.

I’ll have @amanda-hendrickson take a look as well.

Thank you.

 

 

[Anonymous]

Hi @shamayah-neveling

Your profile looks great! It flows very nicely, gives great info, focuses on THEM, and is very intriguing!

AWESOME job!

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