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Updated after your first round of feedback: https://www.linkedin.com/in/jannay/
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Hi @jannay-murphy-hughes! Thank you for sending this over and happy to review it.
Your profile photo, banner image, and headline look good!
For the headline please remove the * symbol because it’s breaking the flow.
About:
For this section, i would recommend introducing your first sentences by saying “Here’s what i do in a few words”
I help clients like YOU by delivering the Real Estate Experience You Deserve when You Buy and/or Sell a Home.
Essentially…
You are able to save precious time and uneccesary stress. You have an Agent who Believes in Your Dreams as Much as You Do!
Jannay, just fix the random capitalized words. Try to make it grammatically correct to ease the flow of your message.
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I want you to use Kent’s About section as a guideline because I mainly want you to remove the bullet points.
This should really help you with removing those bullet points at the end and focusing on a powerful sales letter.
https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/
Call to action needs to be stronger at the end:
If you’re ready for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!
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Hi @jannay-murphy-hughes! LOOKS AWESOME – super proud of you and all of your revisions!!
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