Profile review and headline

[Paula Cirulli]

Can you review my profile and headline?  I look forward to your feedback.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/paulacirulli/

 

Thank you.

Paula

[Paula Cirulli]

I am resending this profile review because I think my tagging was incorrect.  Here you go.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/paulacirulli/

[n d]

Hi,  @paula-cirulli!

Nice job taking massive imperfect action on your profile! Below is my feedback:

Great profile photo! Can you send it to our graphic designer and have her add a white background for you?? Once she sends the photo back, please zoom in more so we can see your face clearly.

I don’t like your background photo very much. It’s not very inviting. I’d also like you to email our graphic designer and tell her a little about your field of business and she can create something better.

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline:

I like what you have, it just needs to be polished. How about filling out this template:

Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞MSG Me!

Summary:

Please ONLY focus on [buying or selling] NOT BOTH. When you focus on one individual service, this will elevate your message and attract clients more directly. So, choose which one is best for you.

Instead of:

“Wouldn’t you like to work with a REALTOR who is RESULTS DRIVEN with so many years of experience that they can make your life EASIER finding the home of your dreams with NO HASSLE?”

How about:

Are you finally READY to work with an expert Realtor who can make your life EASIER by finding you the home of your dreams without adding more work on your end?

Do you NEED ____?

WANT ___________?

If you answered “YES” to those questions… I know EXACTLY how to help!

When you work with me, YOU get ____.

Yep! You read that right!

WHO I WORK WITH: ___, ______,_____

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^ here is an example of a profile that follows the outline I’m providing

https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/

You’ve got GOOD content but it just needs better organization.

Detail HOW they help their clients, WHO they work with, etc.

Call to action looks GREAT 🙂

Tag me in your revision!

[Paula Cirulli]

How about this Negeen?  I’ve been pretty busy this week so it has taken me a while to get back to my profile and headline but I appreciate all your help and suggestions.  Please review this and let me know what you think.  Thanks again.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/paulacirulli/

[Paula Cirulli]

I sent this late on Friday.  I just want to make sure you’ve seen my update on my profile and headline.  Do you have any feedback?

https://www.linkedin.com/in/paulacirulli/

 

Thanks… Paula

[n d]

Hi @paula-cirulli! Thank you for pointing this out to me – sorry about your wait.

Everything looks SUPER! Great work 🙂

[Paula Cirulli]

Thanks.  I’ve just finished the section of module 1 with the Barker 20 and the specific real estate questions.  I’ll be starting my Barker 20.  Woohoo!

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