Profile Review

[Claudia Dill]

Hi Halle and Negeen,

Finally getting this into the correct location…I see the flow now.  I will appreciate your feedback on this start that is SO much more interesting than what I had before.  Much of it comes from my website,

Home Page

Thank you again for your time and support!!!

Claudia Dill

http://www.linkedin.com/in/claudia-dill

 

[n d]

Hi @claudia-dill! Thank you for posting in the right forum and taking action on your profile! Happy to provide your feedback:

Beautiful profile photo!!

You also need a background photo (the rectangular blue space behind your profile photo). I want you to email our graphic designer and tell her a little about your field of business and she can create something for you to use!

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline:

What you have is a good start! I’d like it to really shine. How about filling this template:

Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients In [LOCATION]☆☞MSG Me!

Summary:

I love that you started your summary off asking pain point questions but you currently have 5 and that is a lot. The first question you ask is far too long to be a question on its own.

Please choose 3 concise and powerful pain point questions to start off your summary.

You’ve got some good information but there needs to be more content. Could you talk more about HOW you help them??

Check out these examples of sales letters you can copy and get inspiration from:

https://www.linkedin.com/in/jennifer-harris-aa0487119/
https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/

GREAT call to action!!

[Claudia Dill]

@negeen-dargahi, @halle-eavelyn

Thanks for the feedback, Nageen.  Here is the newest version of my profile.  I am in the process of emailing Lindsey for the background.

http://www.linkedin.com/in/claudia-dill

[n d]

SUPER job, @claudia-dill!!

I wanted to revise your first 2 questions because they seemed a little off. Below are the revised questions:

Wouldn’t you love to STOP having to rush and prep for ANOTHER showing?

or

Wouldn’t you love to actually have QUALIFIED buyers looking at your property??

Is your mortgage taking MORE and MORE of your hard earned money?

(let me know what you think of the 2 revised questions!)

Also, there are some bigger gaps/spaces in your profile to fix.

Everything else looks awesome! Proud of you 🙂

[Claudia Dill]

@negeen-dargahi, @halle-eavelynle

Thanks, Nageen.  I liked the first one and used it.  The next was more for realtors, which I am not.  And I modified the 3rd.  See what you think.

As to the spacing, I did tighten it up some.  Is that what you were referring to?

Thanks again.   Bre was a big help with this.

http://www.linkedin.com/in/claudia-dill

 

[n d]

@claudia-dill, looks SO much better 🙂 great improvements!!

 

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