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http://www.linkedin.com/in/shelbie-butler-realtor
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Hi @shelbie-butler! Thank you for your patience while I give you feedback – below are all my comments for revision 🙂
Your current profile photo is good but I’d like a photo of you facing the camera head-on instead of at an angle – your head is also cut off. If you can find another great photo please do so. Also, have Lindsey, our graphic designer, add a white background for you to make it look professional.
I don’t like your background photo very much. It could also look more custom and professional. I’d also like you to email Lindsey, and tell her a little about your field of business and she can create something better!
Headline:
So, do most people know what J.D stands for?? If not, consider writing out the word. But, your headline is a little wordy. Could you place it in the template below and copy and paste into your headline spot? That will make a world of a difference.
Want _________ WITHOUT [PAIN POINT]?☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _______☆☞ Message Me!
FOR EXAMPLE:
Want Maximum PROFIT From Selling Your Home WITHOUT Stress?☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients In [LOCATION]☆☞ Message Me!
About section:
Okay so right now, I’m so glad you have a clear idea of WHO you want to work with… but your About section is very short and we want it to look like a detailed sales letter.
Like this –> https://www.linkedin.com/in/elois-fuller-9b033723/
Here’s Kents —> https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/
^ i’d consider modeling your outline similar to one of these.
You need to have information on WHAT you do, WHO you work with, WHY they should work with you, and HOW you can help them. And the idea is to lead them effortlessly through your sales letter to then end it with your call to action.
Consider starting off your About section asking 3 short and sweet pain point questions, and then leading in to your message.
Give it another go, and then tag me and I’ll take another look 🙂
Great work taking action!
Also, there needs to be better information and better organization to lead them effortlessly through your sales letter.
Please refer to these profiles from other realtors in the program. Copy the FORMAT/outline and pay attention to the way they lead you through their profile.
Look how they detail HOW they help their clients, WHO they work with, etc.
https://www.linkedin.com/in/jennifer-harris-aa0487119/
https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/Please go back through the lesson – you need a lot more content!!
You need to tell them:
what you do, how you help them, who you work with, why they should work with you
CALL TO ACTION – you need a better one:If you’re READY for _______ message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!
Please tag me after you make the necessary revisions!
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Hey @shelbie-butler! Definitely – that’s fine!
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