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An excellent profile and engagingly written. To be sure any potential investor would be inspired by your profile. I am a Real Estate Sales Executive, and I will be on the lookout through my Florida Goldcoast Circuit for properties for you to consider for an investment project. Well done.
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Hi @vernon-henry, nice job taking action! Below is my feedback I’d like you to implement:
Nice profile photo! Can you email our graphic designer, Lindsey, and have her add a white background for you? This will help it look more professional.
You also need a background photo (the rectangular blue space behind your profile photo). I want you to email our graphic designer and tell her a little about your field of business and she can create something for you to use!
Headline:
This is the best piece of ‘real estate’ on your LinkedIn profile.
This needs some work. How about filling out this template:
Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞MSG Me!
Summary:
Please make sure you watch Halle’s video called: “BENEFITS MARKETING and BENEFITS MARKETING II videos in the Transformational Business Strategy module (bottom middle module on your MAIN DASHBOARD – turquoise with a bullseye) video index is to the right of the video window, in alphabetical order.
There’s far too much emphasis on you and not enough on them.
Your first 2 sentences of your summary are the MOST important.
How about you ask 3 POWERFUL pain point questions your clients struggle with.
What are their pain points? “Tired of _____” “Want _______ but CANT?” “Are you ______?” THEN, after you list pain points, say HOW you can help them and WHAT exactly you do to help them achieve that.
Also, your paragraphs are a bit chunky and need better organization. (check out the examples I provided and look at the format which you can copy)
I know you’re a real estate investor… but these will be great to copy or refer to:
https://www.linkedin.com/in/laurabarkerjd/
https://www.linkedin.com/in/bre-zientarski/
https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/
You want to provide information that is:
Telling your readers WHO you work with, HOW you help them and WHY they should work with you.
Call To Action:
You need one!
If you’re ready for _______ then message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!
Please tag me in your revision!
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