Profile Review

[Robert Eldridge]

Hello,

Just started and would like to know where I can improve my profile.

http://www.linkedin.com/in/roberteldridge

[n d]

Hi @robert-eldridge!! First off, powerful profile you’ve got! It’s ALPHA and really draws a crowd that is fed up with healthcare companies! I love it.

Send your profile photo to our graphic designer and have her add in a white background for you
—> Lindsey@coredm.com

Great, background photo!

Your headline is fantastic – I just added a nice little touch  —>

Employee Healthcare Costs KILL Businesses!☆I can Help YOU screw the Health Insurance Companies☆☞MSG Me!

You should still add a little bit of information on how you’ll serve your clients, maybe 2 sentences?

Great call to action. Honestly, fantastic job all around 🙂

 

[Robert Eldridge]

Thank you,

I made the corrections you suggested and I emailed over my photo.

 

Thanks.

 

Robert

 

[n d]

Looks great, @robert-eldridge 🙂

 

[Angela McCants]

Hi!  I’d like everything reviewed but I’m not sure how to go about submitting…  I look forward to our phone session tomorrow because I’m not pleased with this imperfection at all! 🙁

Angela@Massive Imperfect Action!  🙂

Profile;

It’s a wonderful thing when you can help someone make a positive change in their life when it comes to where and how they want to live. I love empowering my clients. Some people want to move into a larger home while some would like to live in a home much smaller or more manageable. That’s where listening intently comes in. Whether young or old, its a joy to empower my clients by giving them the information they need to make the best decisions for them.

The financial, social, and emotional aspects all come into play and I’m happy to accommodate with a great team that will help them every step of the way. If they are selling it is a good feeling knowing that  I’m able to help my clients make a wise decision on what to improve and what to leave as is, depending on their particular market. We then look at the best time to put their home on the market, which contractors are best to hire for their particular needs, and we cover all the nuances, all the way to having a team help them to get packed, moved, and set up in their new home!

[n d]

Hi @angela-mccants!! No worries, the way you posted is exactly how. Just make sure you’re in the right forum which you are 🙂

So, I’d like you to add your LinkedIn profile content in your actual profile and then send me the URL so I can provide you adequate feedback.

If you don’t know how, click on ‘tutorials’ on the left side of the screen and then watch the first video. It will show you how. ALSO PLEASE watch the other tutorial videos 🙂

 

[Glen Scharer]

Hi, I just reworked my profile from your suggestions and would like to know what you think?

 

https://www.linkedin.com/in/glen-scharer/

 

Thanks for all the help, Glen

[n d]

Hi @glen-scharer! Nice work on revising. Few things:

Take off the quotation marks on your first pain point question. Also, don’t capitalize the beginning of each word in your summary. Write it normally.

How about you format your questions like this —->

Are you TIRED of bad tenants, management companies, AND continuous maintenance costs?

Are you considering selling your rentals for an easier less stressful type of investment?

Would it be convenient to make one call and have ALL of these problems go away?

If this sounds like something you’re worried about… I know EXACTLY how to help you!

(then you can go on with the rest of your summary, but take note of how I formatted above to keep your interest)

Your call to action could be more powerful!

Nice work, regardless 🙂

 

[Angela McCants]

Hi @negeen-dargahi!  I’ve edited my profile and would love to hear your feedback.

Thank you!

Angela

https://www.linkedin.com/in/angelamccantslifestyle/

 

[n d]

Hi @angela-mccants!! Thank you for sending that and taking action! Below is my feedback:

Love your profile photo. Can you zoom in 50% so we can see your smiling face?
You also NEED a background photo. Email our graphic designer and she will create one for you 🙂

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline is on the right path, but how about this outline to better detail your work —->

Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients In [LOCATION]☆☞MSG Me!

Summary:

You don’t really have enough information and I’d like you to refer to these examples of what we want your profile to look like!

https://www.linkedin.com/in/jennifer-harris-aa0487119/
https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/

Outline of summary you can follow and fill in:

Your first 2 sentences of your summary are the MOST important. How about you list 3 questions your clients struggle with. What are their pain points? “Tired of _____” “Want _______ but CANT?” “Are you ______?”

THEN, after you list pain points, say HOW you can help them and WHAT exactly you do to help them achieve that.
2 sentences how are you different than your competitors

Who you like to work with

Then add a call to action with your contact info:

If you’re wanting _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______to see if we’re a good fit!

[Angela McCants]

Thanks Negeen!  Working on it and I’ve emailed the graphic designer. 🙂

[n d]

@angela-mccants, I looked back on your revised summary and I really want you to look back at my feedback above ^^ and please look at the examples I provided. Look how long theirs is with the information they provided. You don’t want to write about yourself. You want to write about how you serve your clients and why they should work with you 🙂

Please work on this and notify me on your revision.

[Angela McCants]

@negeen-dargahi  Let me know your thoughts!  I also have a video on my business FB page.  I’m not sure how to move it though… https://www.facebook.com/angelamccants10/videos/1964779253548759/ It’s totally IMPERFECT.. Will be working on another one – but let me know your thoughts on it as well.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/angelamccantslifestyle/

Thanks!!

Angela

[n d]

What a powerful video @angela-mccants!! Love this. Okay so for sure add this to your LinkedIn profile and I would like you to work on your infomercial (when you get there) because it’s a great call to action video. Since nowhere in the video you sent me, it says “call me Today if you want _______”.

SO, when you get there, send me the script first and then I’ll approve you to film 🙂

 

[Angela McCants]

@negeen-dargahi Was the profile better or should I continue working on it?

Thanks!

Angela

[n d]

Excellent work, @angela-mccants!!! It seriously looks so much better!

Also, have you emailed Lindsey about your background photo?

 

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