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https://www.linkedin.com/in/karendosslns/
I am totally new and I’m not sure I’m doing this right.
Thank you for your help!
Karen E Doss
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Hey @karen-doss! Great job posting your profile for feedback and taking action! Your feedback is below:
LOVELY profile photo!! Very professional.
I don’t like your background photo very much. It’s not very inviting. I’d like you to email Lindsey, our graphic designer, and tell her a little about your field of business and she can create something better!
Headline:
You’re on the right page about your headline… but a few tiny tweaks. Try filling in this template below and copy and pasting into that slot so you get the cute icons. Think of your client’s pain points:
Want ________ WITHOUT _______?☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients In [LOCATION]☆☞ Message Me!
About section:
Because the first 2 sentences of your sales letter are the most important, you want the full focus on your clients, on THEM and less on you. So, remove “Some of my greatest achievements” – instead I recommend asking 3 short and sweet pain point questions.
Want ______?
Are you NEEDING ____?
What ______?
If this sounds like you… I know exactly how to help you.
Essentially…
When you work with me, _________.
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Also, there needs to be better information and better organization to lead them effortlessly through your sales letter.
Talk about: WHO you work with, HOW you help your clients, and why they should work with you. But I recommend using more “you” than “I”.
Examples:
https://www.linkedin.com/in/elois-fuller-9b033723/
401K profile
https://www.linkedin.com/in/paulgennuso/
Call to action looks good 🙂
Please tag me after you make the necessary revisions!
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