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“Do you want your Next Property Loan to be Stress-Free? Do you want the best property loan structure to minimise your annual tax bill? Does this sound too good to be true? It might sound like that, but after many years of experience in the finance and property market, I will tell you that people can have their cake and eat it, too — when it comes to Property Finance, at least.
I give my clients up-to-date Property Finance Education on how best to get your finance approved, best areas to invest in property based on their property investing goals. I will save you Valuable Time and $ by HAVING your property finance approved quickly and structured correctly to not only minimise your tax obligations, but also maximise your borrowing capacity so you can look at purchasing your NEXT PROPERTY in the SHORTEST possible time frame. Stop worrying about the Major banks making finance harder to get approved and complicated paperwork. My expert advice on loan structuring will see your reaching your property portfolio goals in no time whatsoever — without you having to lift a finger.
If you want your Next Property Purchase to be Stress-Free, please call me today to discuss working together – 0427 412 475. Thanks.”
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@Hi @grant-brown!
This is a really great start!
I like your first paragraph but there are a few typos and grammatical errors in the second.
“I give my clients up-to-date Property Finance Education on how best to get your finance approved, best areas to invest in property based on their property investing goals.”
Change this to: I give my clients the best up-to-date Property Finance Education on how to get approved, and the best areas to invest in based on property investing goals.”
See how this flows a lot better without over using the words property and finance? It sounds more natural and confident.
Your next sentence is way too long! Break it up so it sounds more natural for when you’re saying it on camera.
Re-read it slowly so you catch those sentences that could be worded differently!
For your call to action take out the “please and thanks” so it’s: If you want your Next Property Purchase to be Stress-Free, call me today to discuss working together – 0427 412 475.”
TAG ME IN YOUR REVISION!
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@amanda-hendrickson Hi Amanda, Can you check my revised script please.
Do you want your Next Property Loan to be Stress-Free? Do you want the best property loan structure to minimise your annual tax bill? Does this sound too good to be true? It might sound like that, but after many years of experience in the finance and property market, I will tell you that people can have their cake and eat it, too — when it comes to Property Finance, at least.
I give my clients the best up-to-date Property Finance advice on how to get approved, and the best way to structure their property loans for tax reduction purposes and to increase their property portfolio.
If you want your Next Property Purchase to be Stress-Free and profitable, call me today to discuss working together – 0427 412 475.”
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@Hey @grant-brown!
Nice job! This flow much better!
The only thing you need to slightly change is your second paragraph. There are too many “and” in your sentence. Let’s make that two separate sentences like this:
I give my clients the best up-to-date Property Finance advice on how to get approved, and the best way to structure their property loans for tax reduction purposes. Which, in turn, increases their property portfolio!
Everything else looks great!
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