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WHAT I DO IN 15 WORDS OR LESS.
I make YOU feel like Royalty in handling all details of YOUR Real Estate Transaction.
“Essentially…
We consult, negotiate, and handle all the details so that my clients will have their transaction of their largest asset they will probably ever have…their home, completed successfully and in a timely manner.
Being a highly skilled, dedicated, and passionate real estate consultant committed to make sure YOU feel like Royalty. Because when YOU feel like Royalty it is by us being YOUR trusted real estate consultant.
With this process, YOU may be able to save up to 10X the amount you would have to spend in time and Money.
How is this done?
By anticipating YOUR needs, leading YOU through the proven process of the transaction with lots of communication and active listening. I promise myself, and my clients to always be on time, to always be honest, and to always do what we say we are going to do. We treat your transaction like it is our own money and time during this process.
By Listening to YOUR every need and desire in making the transaction exactly what YOU are looking for and promise to communicate with YOU on every detail and even when there is nothing to discuss to still communicate with you every week.
Our promise is to keep you up to date on what is happening in the market, and what is happening where YOUR transaction is happening. Even if YOU are not in the area, we will still communicate with YOU with all the details and information to keep You informed.
When we work with YOU, we use a deliberate, organized, orchestrated and proven process. YOUR time is valuable, so we are always willing and able to work through any issues that arise in a timely and professional manner.
I want You to be so outrageously happy with our high level of service and ecstatic with our handling of your transaction, that you want to tell everyone what a great experience YOU had.
Let me help YOU today, so you can enjoy a stress-free transaction that meets and exceeds your goal. Call me TODAY at 480-580-2990 or message me here on LinkedIn so you can be treated like Royalty.
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Hi @ed-benson! Nice job revising!
Next time, please add these changes to your profile so I can provide feedback on 100% of your page.
Few changes I’d like you to make – please proof read:
Change: I make YOU feel like Royalty in handling all the details of YOUR Real Estate Transaction.
To: I help clients like YOU get TOP NOTCH service for your entire real estate transaction!
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Take out the quotation mark before “essentially
2nd paragraph below needs to be revised:
We consult, negotiate, and handle all the details so that my clients will have their transaction of their largest asset they will probably ever have…their home, completed successfully and in a timely manner.
(you could instead have)
WHAT WE DO:
We consult, negotiate, and handle all the details so you don’t have to. Leave it to the experts!
(add 1-2 more clear sentences on how you help).—
You have great content, Ed, but the format really needs work. Try copying the format of one of the examples I provided down below and just add your info to it!
https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/
Great work, overall!
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WHAT I DO IN 15 WORDS OR LESS.
I help clients like YOU get TOP NOTCH service for your entire real estate transaction!
Essentially…
WHAT WE DO:
We consult, negotiate, and handle all the details so that my clients will have their transaction of their largest asset they will probably ever have…their home, completed successfully and in a timely manner.
WHAT DOES THIS DO FOR YOU:
Being a highly skilled, dedicated, and passionate real estate consultant committed to make sure YOU feel like Royalty. Because when YOU feel like Royalty it is by us being YOUR trusted real estate consultant.
With this process, YOU may be able to save up to 10X the amount you would have to spend in time and Money.
HOW IS THIS DONE?
By anticipating YOUR needs and leading YOU through the proven process of the transaction with lots of communication and active listening. I promise myself, and my clients to always be on time, to always be honest, and to always do what we say we are going to do. We treat your transaction like it is our own money and time during this process.
By Listening to YOUR every need and desire in making the transaction exactly what YOU are looking for and with a promise to communicate with YOU on every detail, even when there is nothing to discuss to still communicate with you every week.
YOUR RESULT…
YOU will be kept up to date on what is happening in the market, and what is happening where YOUR transaction is happening. Even if YOU are not in the area, we will still communicate with YOU with all the details and information to keep You informed.
AND
When we work with YOU, we use a deliberate, organized, orchestrated and proven process. YOUR time is valuable, so we are always willing and able to work through any issues that arise in a timely and professional manner.
YOUR RESULTS
I want You to be so outrageously happy with our high level of service and ecstatic with our handling of your transaction, that you want to tell everyone what a great experience YOU had, like Bob, “We would like to add that in our 55 years of buying and selling homes we have never been represented as well. He is one of the most diligent agents we’ve ever dealt with”.
Let me help YOU today, so you can enjoy a stress-free transaction that meets and exceeds your goal. Call me TODAY at 480-580-2990 or message me here on LinkedIn so you can be treated like Royalty
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Hi @ed-benson, can you please put this in your actual LinkedIn so I can provide full feedback? I also want to make sure all of this fits in your summary category.
Please let me know when you have done so and provide the link.
Thank you!
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Hi @ed-benson! Excellent job taking action based on my feedback!
Your background image looks great!
The headline looks very to the point and engaging!
The rest of your summary looks SUPER. Great work, Ed!
You are good to move on 🙂
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