Please review my Profile

[Jay Galea]

Hello! Please review my linked in profile! @negeen-dargahi

http://www.linkedin.com/in/jay-galea-0b952868

 

Thank you!

 

Jay

[n d]

Hey @jay-galea, thank you for submitting your profile for a review!

Your banner image looks awesome – so glad that was created 🙂

Your profile photo, if possible, would look more symetrical if it had you in the center.

Headline looks great!

About section:

So, right now this is reading like a resume and based on the lesson, you want to lead your perfect client though your sales letter. Make it less about you and your journey and more about what you do, how you help your clients, who you work with, and why your clients should work with you.

You also want to break up the chunky paragraphs so that it’s easier to read.

You’ve GOT the content but you need to organize your message and points just a bit more. Look at the examples below for what I’m talking about:

Pro tip: go to Kent’s profile, copy his About section, and ADD your own information to it. His outline is what we teach in the program!

https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/

Here is what we look for in a profile:

https://www.linkedin.com/in/danielgagnonre/

Call to action needs to be stronger at the end:

If you’re ready for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

Please tag me after you make the necessary revisions! 🙂

 

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