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Hi @jace-lotz! Thank you for your patience while I worked on your feedback. First off, welcome to the program! Below are my comments for revision:
Great profile photo!! Can you zoom in a pinch more so there isn’t as much white space on the right side? I’d like for your face to be centered.
I don’t like your background photo very much. I’d also like you to email our graphic designer, Lindsey, and tell her a little about your field of business and she can create something better.
Headline (words under name):
Your headline is in the right direction but because this is such a valuable spot on your profile, I want us to take advantage of it. How about filling out this template:
Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞Message Me!
Summary:
This is a good start but there needs to be better information and better organization to lead them effortlessly through your sales letter.
Please make sure you watch Halle’s video called: “BENEFITS MARKETING and BENEFITS MARKETING II videos in the Transformational Business Strategy module (bottom middle module on your MAIN DASHBOARD – turquoise with a bullseye) video index is to the right of the video window, in alphabetical order.
There’s far too much emphasis in here on YOU and not enough on THEM – these videos will help you see why it’s important to make it so much more about them!
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You could start your summary off by asking 3 short and sweet and POWERFUL pain point questions!
Tell them what you do in a few short words, and then get into WHO you work with, HOW you help your clients, and WHY they should work with you.
Pro tip: go to Kent’s profile, copy his About section, and ADD your own information to it. His outline is what we teach in the program! This should really help you with the outline of your sales letter or even as a form of inspiration when speaking to your perfect client.
https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/
You also need a better call to action. How about this:
If you’re ready for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!
Please tag me after you make these changes and i’ll continue to help you make it look great 🙂
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