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Hello, please review my linked in profile and provide me with constructive feedback!
https://www.linkedin.com/in/danielgagnonre/
With gratitude!
Dan Gagnon
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Hi there, @dan-gagnon! It was so great speaking with you this morning – below are my comments for revision:
Good profile photo! I’m glad you’re already in contact with Lindsey in regards to your banner image – please let me know if you don’t hear back after a few days. She’s typically very timely.
Headline:
Based on the teachings, we have found it’s best to focus your sales letter on either sellers or buyers – you can of course add this in your About section later on, but it’s good to choose the one that excites you the most for your message. This will help it be direct.How about this:
Want Maximum PROFIT From Selling Your Home WITHOUT Stress?☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients In [LOCATION]☆☞ Message Me!
Want QUALIFIED Buyers ________ ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients In [LOCATION]☆☞ Message Me!
About Section:
I love your energy at the beginning of your message – I will say, it would be better for you to showcase your abilities and why they should work with you, and THEN at the end ask to connect to “see if we’re a good fit” because you want to be the “benevolent alpha” as Halle likes to say in her training videos (Transformational Business Strategy Module).
When someone clicks to view your profile, the first 2 sentences of your profile About/summary section are available for them until they have to click “see more”. That means, your first 2 sentences are very important.
Also, you have some good content, it just needs to be better organized with more information on WHO you work with, HOW you help, and WHY they should work with you.
Pro tip: go to Kent’s profile, copy his About section, and ADD your own information to it. His outline is what we teach in the program!
https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/
Want a realtor example?
https://www.linkedin.com/in/elois-fuller-9b033723/
Call to action:
If you’re ready for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!
Please tag me after you make the necessary revisions 🙂
You’re doing GREAT!
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Hello Negeen,
Thank you for the feedback. Is it okay to use the realtor example and tweak it?
Dan
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Hey @dan-gagnon! Yes, absolutely 🙂
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