Please Review My LinkedIn Profile

[Eric Calciano]

Hi @negeen-dargahi,

Could you please review my LinkedIn Profile?

https://www.linkedin.com/in/ericcalciano/

Thank you!

Best,

Eric

[n d]

Hi @eric-calciano! A really nice job on your LinkedIn profile, you provided loads of great content!!

Below is my feedback:

If you’re able to zoom out a bit on your profile photo, that would be best rather than bits of your heads being cropped. In addition to that, if you’re able to take a better photo with eye contact with the camera lens, I would highly recommend that. Love that you’re smiling! When you have the photo, I want you to email it to Lindsey@coredm.com and have her add on a white background for you.

Nice cover photo!

GREAT headline, right to the point and provides great information. I would capitalize “WITHOUT” so it really grabs their attention.

Summary:

I want you to put —> “WHAT I DO IN 16 WORDS OR LESS” above your starting sentence “I deliver”

After you say the “I deliver part” I want you to write “Essentially…” above the sentence “I take the stress”

When you write the “apparently” sentence, I want you to take out “archaic” and make that sentence less complex —>

“We are in the 21st century… so WHY are we doing ________?” <— something like that. Less complex and easy to follow.

When you get into stats, you can introduce it like:

WHAT I’VE DONE FOR PAST CLIENTS –>

I REDUCED a company’s liability premiums by $12,000 per year while providing them with NEW TECHNOLOGY to improve the implementation and administration of their policies.

YES. No lie!

We can do that for YOUR business as well. We tailor it just for you!”

GREAT call to action!

Overall, superb job, Eric!

Please tag me in your revision 🙂

 

 

 

[Eric Calciano]

Hi @negeen-dargahi!

Thanks for the feedback, I really appreciate it!

I made all the changes you recommended (except the photo: planning on a photo shoot this weekend).

I was having some trouble with the 21st century comment. I cut it down to one sentence, “While most insurance companies continue to use technology that is dated and obsolete, my CUTTING EDGE TECHNOLOGY takes the stress out of dealing with insurance.”. Let me know if you think that’s alright.

Best,

Eric

[n d]

Hi @eric-calciano! SO MUCH BETTER! It really flows in the right direction for me to want to pick up my phone and call you.

Great work taking action! Perfect and when you take those professional photos, have Lindsey add in a white background for you 🙂

 

 

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