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@negeen-dargahi, @kent-littlejohn, @halle-eavelyn
Please review my LinkedIn Profile and provide comments.
I have completed the bulk of my LinkedIn profile based on Matt’s narration in Video #4.
I will continue to enhance the Features section as well as other as I go along. I’m anxious to just keep moving forward :))
Thanks again Dean Hanson
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Hey @dean-hanson! I’m happy to take a look – below are my comments:
Nice banner image – super professional! Did Lindsey make that for you?? (if not – ask her to make one and see which you like best)
Your face is difficult to see in your profile photo. Zoom in by 50% – if you want it to POP more, I also recommend asking Lindsey to add a white background for you (like Kent has).
Here is her email: Lindsey@coredm.com
Headline:
Your headline is good but I also wanted to take a stab at making one that stands out more. If you choose to stick with yours, remove the “Me!” after the —–.
READY To Consider New Construction? Have Questions?☆ EXPERT Broker Helping Clients With Purchasing a New-Build ☆☞MSG Me!
About Section:
Dean, I really enjoyed reading your sales letter BUT it needs to be formatted better so it looks more appealing.
Take a look at this profile –> https://www.linkedin.com/in/elois-fuller-9b033723/
I want your OUTLINE to look like that. So, copy the format (kent has the same and it’s what we teach in the program) and ADD your content to the outline.
Does that make sense??
You have everything but it needs to be better organized.
CALL TO ACTION:
Okay, so you have a call to action and then a paragraph talking about yourself. Reverse that. Short description of who you are and then have a powerful close to your sales letter.
If you’re READY for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!
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Please tag me after you make the necessary revisions!
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@negeen-dargahi, @matt-barcus,
Hi Negeen,
I thought I’ve responded to this thread twice before, but can’t find my requests to review again.
I’ve implemented changes based on your suggestions and request another review. If it still not right I will redo.
http://www.linkedin.com/in/dghanson
Thanks
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Hey @dean-hanson! Thank you for tagging me – below are my comments:
WOW – love your profile photo, banner, and headline. So clean and professional!
Below, I’ve rewritten parts of your profile About section. Figured it would be easier. If you like it, just copy and paste it. Overall – everything looks awesome. I’m just making some format tweaks.
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WHAT I DO IN A FEW WORDS:
I help clients like you, making your new construction dream a REALITY.
Essentially…
The purchase of a newly built home is both exciting and exhilarating – but you need to have someone on your side that knows the ins and outs of starting and completing new construction.
That’s where I come in!
When you work with ME, you will feel 100% comfortable knowing you will be in the loop throughout the entire process.
What’s better?
My mission is to provide you with service DESERVING of your time and attention; I am committed to providing you excellent value before, during, and after your purchase or sale!
Not only that…
YOU will benefit from a lifetime of experience, including twenty years in Real Estate Sales, and an additional 21 years as a Software Engineer and Consultant. I’ve helped hundreds of individuals and families buy and sell real estate as well as Custom Homebuilders to sell their homes and land.
SATISFIED CLIENTS have allowed me to help them: buy and sell all types of existing homes, Builder Spec Homes, Custom or Trac Homes, Modular, Mobile homes, second homes, investment properties, and raw land for a homestead or large acreage for development.
So let me ask you…
If you are finally ready to make the leap, message me here on LinkedIn TODAY for a free no-obligation consultation to see if we are a good fit!
Dean Hanson – eXp Realty, REALTOR®, Associate Broker
(LinkedIn) Message Me, (Email) Dean@DeanHanson.com, or (Web) http://www.deanhanson.com
(Office) 623-800-4930, (Mobile) 507-254-7664 -
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Looks amazing, @dean-hanson!!!
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