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Hi there, @troy-seyfert! It is so wonderful to have you here in the program with us. Below are my comments on your profile and tips for revision:
I love your profile photo! Very professional and engaging.
You also need a better background banner image behind your profile photo. You could be doing a lot more with this space. Please email our graphic designer, Lindsey, what your field of work is and she will create something custom for you. You can also send her logos you want added.
Headline (words under name):
PERFECT job on this! I love that you added the “(Re/Max Top 40 under 40 in 2022)!
About Section:
Remove the dash ( – ) from the beginning of your sentence. Your first sentence is honestly very hard to read. Keep it short and clean. You don’t need to add in “(Re/Max Top 40 under 40 in 2022)” again in your message. I’d really like you to make the first two sentences as much about how you help your clients, as much as possible.
When someone clicks to view your profile, the first 2 sentences of your profile About/summary section are available for them until they have to click “see more”. That means, your first 2 sentences are very important.
You could say:
“What I Do in # words or Less”
I help clients like YOU _________.
Essentially…
(and then continue with your sales letter)
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There are some capitalized words that don’t need to be capitalized:
EX: I allow you to focus on your LIFE (family, career, upcoming move) INSTEAD of Stressing about Selling your Home with PROACTIVE communication, SKILLED negotiating, and TOP-NOTCH marketing.
Are these locations?? If so, let people know you’re listing locations:
East Lansing, Dewitt, Haslett, Okemos, Mason, Holt, Dimondale, Grand Ledge, Bath, Laingsburg, Perry, St. Johns, and MORE!
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Overall, I LOVE your benevolent alpha energy!! The rest of your profile looks wonderful and just make those changes and let me know if you want me to take another look 🙂
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Negeen Dargahi how is it now? Thank you for the revisions. They really helped and I reached out to Lindsey as well
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Hi there @troy-seyfert, really great job making those revisions!! After reviewing, I just tweaked your first sentence a bit so it flows better.
Here is what I do in 25 words or less: I sell homes FASTER and top dollar!
I’m an expert online marketer with relentless hustle in the Greater Lansing area.
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Everything else looks fantastic!!!
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