Please review my Linked in Profile

[Steve Crawford]

@negeen-dargahi

@halle-eavelyn

@kent-littlejohn

https://www.linkedin.com/in/youragentsteve

 

[Steven Rath]

Pretty good!

 

Needs a line break after the opening paragraph and “You guessed it”

[Steven Rath]

Pretty good!

Needs a line break after the opening paragraph and “You guessed it”

Steve

[Steve Crawford]

Thank you!

 

[n d]

Hi @steve-crawford, nice job taking action on your profile!!

Great profile photo, background, and headline!!

For the first sentences of your sales letter, how about this:

WHAT I DO IN A FEW WORDS:

I help you sell your house for the hIGHEST possible price using elite-level marketing that targets the right people.

Essentially…

I’ve worked with A LOT of people that wanted to sell their house, and although they’re all different, they always have something in common…
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Try to replace some of the sentences starting with “I” and replace them with “You” – this will help shift the focus more on them when they are reading.

I agree with Steve on the changes as well.

You are good to move forward after making those changes – GREAT work!! 🙂

[Steve Crawford]

OK @negeen-dargahi ….I updated it.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/youragentsteve/

 

Let me know what you think?

Steve

[n d]

SUPER job, @steve-crawford!! 🙂

You are good to move forward!

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