Please check some items and help me move forward

[Laverne Denyer]

First, please check my LinkedIn profile headline: https://www.linkedin.com/in/laverne-e-denyer-52458417/

Then please check my About information at the same link.

After that, please check Lesson 2. I have worked with this and updating my LinkedIn page for over a week, more than the hour daily, and am confused about what goes where.      http://app.hecp.com/hecp/mindset-momentum/lesson-2/

I am having a very difficult time understanding what I am to put into the “Raw Content” and “Summary” components. Frankly, I want help so I can move on. Somehow I want clearer guidance.

 

 

[n d]

Hi @laverne-denyer – great job taking action on your profile! Below are my comments on your LinkedIn profile!

GREAT profile photo!

I don’t like your background photo very much. It could definitely look more professional. I’d also like you to email Lindsey, our graphic designer, and tell her a little about your field of business and she can create something better!

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline:

Your headline is good because it tells people coming to your page what you can

Want _______ WITHOUT _______?☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients ____________ ☆☞ Message Me!

About section:

I love all the information about you (SO AWESOME) but this is also your sales letter so you want to replace “I” with “you” and really speak to THEM and how you help them, who you like to work with, etc.

Since you have good content to work with, you just need a better outline to organize your points.

I’d like you to go to Kent’s profile (below) and copy his outline and just add your own content to it! We teach the outline in the program**

https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/

This should really help your message POP and stand out!!!! 🙂

CALL TO ACTION – you need a better one:

If you’re READY for _______ message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

Please tag me after you make the necessary revisions!

 

 

 

[Laverne Denyer]

Hi There!

I contacted Lindsey regarding a background. In the meantime, I put something else up as a place holder.

Please check my revisions for the About section. Let me know what you think.

Thanks.

[Laverne Denyer]

I forgot to add the profile link

https://www.linkedin.com/in/laverne-e-denyer-52458417/

[Laverne Denyer]

Hi There! @negeen-dargahi

I sent two prior notes but did not remember to tag you in either one. So I’m sending this one.

I contacted Lindsey regarding a background. In the meantime, I put something else up as a place holder.

Please check my revisions in the About section. I’m not sure what more changes I want to make to make it pop. Let me know what you think.

The link is https://www.linkedin.com/in/laverne-e-denyer-52458417/

Thanks.

[Laverne Denyer]

Hi

First, I cannot remember how to begin a new post. Can you remind me please?

Then, please check out my Perfect Client worksheet? http://app.hecp.com/hecp/mindset-momentum/lesson-1/

Thanks.

L

[Laverne Denyer]

I also completed all but the Summery on the Profile Accelerator. Will you please check out my progress for feedback. I’m struggling with the Summary portion.

LESSON 2 – Update Your LinkedIn Profile

[n d]

Hi @laverne-denyer – i’m looking at your LinkedIn Summary section right now – it looks good but you need to press “return” on your keyboard and add some paragraphs and spaces. Right now everything is all smooshed together.

Please remove the bullet points as well.

If you could go back through your Summary and break up the sentences – it will be a LOT easier to read.

It should look like this:

https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/

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You have a call to action in the first few sentences of your summary, and your call to action must be at the bottom.

Try asking 3 pain point questions. Short and sweet.

In my earlier feedback I said to copy Kent’s entire outline and just add your own information to it, please try copying his summary, pasting it in a word document and filling it with your information. I say this because the spacing is already provided for you so it will look a lot cleaner. You HAVE the information, it just needs to look nice 😉

If you’re still having trouble, we can chat about this on the technical call on Wednesday.

Thank you!

 

 

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