My new 30 sec commercial

[Maura Bain]

Hi @negeen-dargahi @halle-eavelyn @kent-littlejohn

 

Here is the link for my 30 sec commercial for your review and feedback

 

Thanks

[n d]

YESSS @maura-bain-2!! This looks so professional and very engaging – I immediately felt at ease and wanted to call you up!

Go ahead and share this on any platform you want. Excellent work!

[Halle Eavelyn]

I like it!! I don’t love it yet.  I can feel you hesitating a little.  You’re SOOOOO warm and friendly – I feel like a little more speed, a little shorter on the pauses between sentences AND raise the camera so you’re not looking down on me.  I agree with Negeen that you can post this one.  AND I suggest you rework it as well.

Great job taking Massive Imperfect Action, @maura-bain-2!

[Maura Bain]

Ok What do you think of the re-make @halle-eavelyn @negeen-dargahi @kent-littlejohn

 

https://youtu.be/hkdrwqDt6Y0

[n d]

Hey @maura-bain-2, great job taking feedback and revising – I like how the camera is at eye level this go around!

I really liked it 🙂

[Maura Bain]

Thanks @negeen-dargahi for the feedback.

I appreciate it, and grateful for all the feedback I can get  :  )

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