my linked in URL

[Patsy Whitney]

https://www.linkedin.com/in/patsy-whitney-realtor/

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Hi @patsy-whitney, awesome job submitting your profile for a review – I’m happy to provide my comments below:

Your profile photo is lovely but it’s hard to see your smiling face. Would you please zoom in a bit more?

You also need a better background banner image behind your profile photo. Please also email our graphic designer, Lindsey, what your field of work is in and she will create something custom for you! Something closely related to your business will really help grab people’s attention.

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline (words under name):

What you currently have written is “Your real estate experience matters.”  BUT based on the teachings in the program, your headline is the best piece of real estate. Let’s really make it POP! Think back on your Perfect Client exercise* How about filling out this template:

Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞Message Me!

Here is one example:

Want SEASIDE Living With RESORT Amenities? ☆ I’m An EXPERT Realtor Helping Clients In Hilton Head Island☆ ☞ Message me!

About Section:

I like how you’re starting off your sales letter asking a pain point question! Your message is very clear and clean. I’d love for you to add a few more bit of info for your sales letter.

When someone clicks to view your profile, the first 2 sentences of your profile About/summary section are available for them until they have to click “see more”. That means, your first 2 sentences are very important.

Also, you HAVE all the content, it just needs to be better organized 🙂

Pro tip: go to Kent’s profile, copy his About section, and ADD your own information to it. His outline is what we teach in the program! This should really help you with removing those bullet points at the end and focusing on a powerful sales letter.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/

Here is what we look for in a profile:

https://www.linkedin.com/in/danielgagnonre/

Call to action at the end:

If you’re ready for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

Please tag me after you make the necessary revisions! 🙂
 

 

[Patsy Whitney]

I feel a little lost and disjointed.

Am trying to mprove my profile

have viewed the profiles you suggested

sitll working on making recommended eits.

I want ot view the nitisl descriptions I wrote for the avatar

and see where to add what?

also

re: profile banner

I believe I have to esend an email to lindseyasking her to give me some better options?

Thank you

Patsy

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