LinkedIn profile for review

[Lance Scott]

Please review my LinkedIn profile.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/lance-scott-5ba84a2b

 

thank you.
Lance

[n d]

Hi @lance-scott, you did a really nice job with your profile!! Below are my comments:

GREAT profile photo!!

Your banner image could be better. I’d like you to email our graphic designer, Lindsey, and tell her a little about your field of business and she can create something better!

NICE headline! Very attention-grabbing!

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I like that you started off your summary section with a pain point question but adding in “golf, baseball, hockey” may be too limiting for a female audience (unless you’d rather focus on males). How about filling this out:

Are you WANTING _________?
Do you NEED __________?
Want __________?

I also feel that saying “I” instead of “we” could be more personable.

Check out Kent’s for reference or take some of his ideas in regards to content/formatting (we teach it in the program):

https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/

Everything looks fantastic – nice call to action!!

Great work, Lance! Super proud of your work!

 

[Lance Scott]

Hey @negeen-dargahi thank you for the input. I have made a few changes and was wondering if you could take a look at it and give me any other ideas.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/lance-scott-5ba84a2b

Also do you find the google chrome or another system work better for messaging on the forum as I see to be only able to use my phone to post.

All the best,

Lance

[n d]

Hi @lance-scott, NICE job revising! It looks great – did you email Lindsey about your banner image? If so, you’re good to move forward!

@matt-barcus could you help out with this??

Lance, I’m using Chrome and Safari occasionally on my computer – is it just not working for you at all?

Could you email support@coredm.com please?

Hopefully, we can resolve that issue!

[Lance Scott]

What is Lindsay’s email?

[n d]

@lance-scott, it is:

Lindsey@coredm.com

[Lance Scott]

@negeen-dargahi

 

headline

hey I was thinking of changing my headline to

to

want clarity around your financial goals. I’m an expert investment advisor helping clients gain clarity. Msg me

 

thoughts?

[Lance Scott]

@negeen-dargahi

 

hey Kent has recommended I make some changes to my headline.

I have written a few different ones and would like your thoughts.

Want to get out of the office and spend more time with your family and friends.  I’m an Expert Financial Advisor creating tailored financial plans to help my client obtain the retirement they want.

Want to get out of the office and spend more time with your family and friends.  I’m an Expert Financial Advisor creating tailored financial plans to help my client pursue the freedom they desire.

Do you wish you were on a beach or golf course right now, rather than stuck in the office?  I’m an Expert Financial Advisor creating tailored financial plans to help my client obtain the retirement they want.

Do you wish you were on a beach or golf course right now, rather than stuck in the office?  I’m an Expert Financial Advisor creating tailored financial plans to help my client pursue the freedom they desire.

thank you

[Lance Scott]

Want to build on your wealth and financial security ☆ I’m An EXPERT Financial Advisor and Portfolio Manager☆ ☞ Message Me!

[n d]

Hey @lance-scott, great job on coming up with options! How about this:

Want To LEAVE The Office And Have Financial Freedom?☆ EXPERT Financial Advisor and Portfolio Manager☆ ☞ Message Me!

You can take out the financial freedom and replace it – just an example:

I also like what you have written above so I would recommend changing through them once in a while and switch it up!!

Good work 🙂

• This reply was modified 4 years, 9 months ago by n d.

[Lance Scott]

@negeen-dargahi

I think this one maybe the best.  Thoughts

Do you want to retire on your own terms?  I am an expert retirement specialist helping clients achieve their vision for success.

thank you for all your help

[n d]

Hi @lance-scott, I’m not sure if that is enticing enough! Really think about their pain points and see what they need immediate help with. If they NEED financial structure so they dont have to rely on their job, that’s something to think about (as an example). But, you could test it out for 2 weeks and see how the responses are to Q1.

But definitely look back at your client avatar and review back over the pain points.

[Lance Scott]

@kent-littlejohn

 

Kent,

 

I was on the Q&A call a few weeks ago and still have not been able to come up with a strong headline. I have rewatched the benefits videos a few times and have went over my avatar, to review the pain points and still nothing. Any help I can get would be very much appreciated. I have been emailing and using the forum to get help but am still getting no where. Please help as I am getting super frustrated.

Lance

[Lance Scott]

@negeen-dargahi

 

thoughts
<p class=”p1″>Are you worried about how your going to retired and still be able to help your children if they need it? I am an Investment Advisor who helps his clients obtain peace of mind

</p>
or

 
<p class=”p1″>Are you worried about how your going to retired and still be able to help your children if they need it? I am an Investment Advisor who creates tailored financial plans for your personal needs </p>

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