Linked in profile second review

[Robert Telecky]

Hi, I made changes to my linked-in profile.  (See the link below )   I am still waiting for  Lindsey to get back to me about creating a banner.

 

https://www.linkedin.com/in/rob-telecky-0238041b/

[n d]

Hey @robert-telecky, nice job! Please review my comments on the headline from my last feeback.

Please review my comments on the About section from my last feedback as well – right now there’s too much “I” and less “you” focus on the clients.

Do you still have the feedback I left you from the initial review? 🙂

If so, please take another look at it.

[Robert Telecky]

Hi,  This is what you said for the headline in the last feedback    Ill take another look at the about.

 
<p class=”p1″>Headline (words under name):</p>
<p class=”p1″>What you have looks great!!</p>

[Robert Telecky]

So I looked again at your comments and I looked at the sample profile you asked me to review.  it’s listed below.  there is a great deal of I in that profile as well.  my thought is people want to know why I am better than other agents how do I tell them what I can do for them without saying this is what I will do?

 

lots of I’s in the profile about.   https://www.linkedin.com/in/danielgagnonre/

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