Linked In Profile – Round 3

[Bill Toujouse]

Hi Negeen

Here is my LI profile (see below).

https://www.linkedin.com/in/btoujouse

 

I would appreciate your thoughts. I am still working on my about section. Any ideas would be very helpful.

Thanks,

Bill

 

[n d]

Hi there @bill-toujouse! Thank you for submitting for review – below are my comments and suggestions:

I really like your background photo but it’s partially cut off by your profile photo. I’d like you to email our graphic designer, Lindsey, and have her create a custom banner background image based on your field of work. Let’s see if that helps.

Great profile photo!

Headline: the headline Halle suggested was great, go ahead and use that!

About section:

EXCELLENT About section – it instantly gripped me and provided all the information a potential client would need!

Your call to action at the end could improve. How about this:

If you’re ready for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

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Excellent work overall 🙂

 

 

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