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Hi @peggy-roegiers! Thank you for submitting your profile for a review – below are my comments:
Beautiful profile photo!!
You also need a better background banner image behind your profile photo. Please also email our graphic designer, Lindsey, what your field of work is in and she will create something custom for you.
Headline (words under name):
LOVE where you’re going with your headline – it just needs to be organized a bit better. Please input it in the template below and copy and paste in the headline slot 🙂
Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞Message Me!
Here is one example:
Want SEASIDE Living With RESORT Amenities? ☆ I’m An EXPERT Realtor Helping Clients In Hilton Head Island☆ ☞ Message me!
About Section:
So, right now i’m reading one chunky paragraph in the 3rd person – remember that this is a sales letter that is meant to be in 1st or 2nd person speaking directly to your perfect client.
When someone clicks to view your profile, the first 2 sentences of your profile About/summary section are available for them until they have to click “see more”. That means, your first 2 sentences are very important.
Also, you HAVE all the content, it just needs to be better organized 🙂
Pro tip: go to Kent’s profile, copy his About section, and ADD your own information to it. His outline is what we teach in the program! This should really help you with removing those bullet points at the end and focusing on a powerful sales letter.
https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/
Here is what we look for in a profile:
https://www.linkedin.com/in/danielgagnonre/
I like your testimonials! Just pick up to 3 that are no longer than 3 sentences each.
Call to action to be placed at the very end:
If you’re ready for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!
Please tag me after you make the necessary revisions! 🙂
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