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@negeen-dargahi, @halle-eavelyn, @kent-littlejohn
Please review my LinkedIn Profile and comment.
https://www.linkedin.com/in/leungjulia/
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Hi @julia-leung!
Sorry for the late response, I was on vacation and now I’m back and ready to help!
Okay first off, GREAT job taking action on your profile… you really are a fast learner!
Your photo and background photo look great.
Let’s make your headline a bit more direct and let’s take out your phone number (that goes at the bottom of your summary)
Try filling this out instead —>
Want To Find QUALIFIED Buyers WITHOUT Losing Money?☆ I’m an EXPERT Realtor Helping Clients In [LOCATION] ☆☞ MSG Me!
@julia-leung guess what? Your summary content looks SUPER! Zero revisions needed on that end. Excellent work!
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@negeen-dargahi, thanks for the reply, I’ll change the headline.
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@julia-leung – OK, some TYPOS. Please proof this CAREFULLY. In your headline, can you add “the” before San Mateo area? (for example) If you don’t want to proof, pay someone $5 on Fiverr to proof it for you!
Also, I think you can lose BOTH these sentences:
This is NOT a plea for MORE business.This is ME helping you gain COMPLETE control of your home selling process.
You’ve just positioned yourself really well. So I think you are GOOD! You don’t need that piece. But it’s a choice, so leave it in if you like it.
GREAT JOB!!
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@julia-leung – OK, some TYPOS. Please proof this CAREFULLY. In your headline, can you add “the” before San Mateo area? (for example) If you don’t want to proof, pay someone $5 on Fiverr to proof it for you!
Also, I think you can lose BOTH these sentences:
This is NOT a plea for MORE business.This is ME helping you gain COMPLETE control of your home selling process.
You’ve just positioned yourself really well. So I think you are GOOD! You don’t need that piece. But it’s a choice, so leave it in if you like it.
GREAT JOB!!
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@halle-eavelyn, thanks for the comment but it’s not a typo or proofing mistake.
I change the headline as suggested by Negeen but it exceeds the character counts if I put the word “the” before San Mateo Area.
My original headline reads “Want to Sell Your Home FAST for TOP DOLLAR with ZERO STRESS? ☆ Call Today (650) 283-2837!
Do you have any other suggestion?
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