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    • #32473

      Jeanette Llabre
      Participant
        @jeanettellabre@gmail.com

        Please review profile @negeen-dargahi

        https://www.linkedin.com/in/jeanettellabre/

         

        Thank you

      • #32514

        n d
        Keymaster
          @negeen@coredm.com

          Hi @jeanette-llabre! Nice work taking action on your profile! Below is my feedback!

          Profile Photo: 

          Looks GREAT!

          Background photo: What you have is not my favorite. I want you to email our graphic designer and tell her a little about your field of business and she can create something for you to use!

          Lindsey@coredm.com

          Headline (words under your name):

          What you currently have is Realtor at CENTURY 21® / and you need something better.

          This is the best piece of ‘real estate’ on your LinkedIn profile. Let’s really make it POP. How about something like this…

          Want Maximum PROFIT From Selling Your Home WITHOUT Stress?☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients In [LOCATION]☆☞ Message Me!

          Summary:

          Please make sure you watch Halle’s video called: “BENEFITS MARKETING and BENEFITS MARKETING II videos in the Transformational Business Strategy module (bottom middle module on your MAIN DASHBOARD – turquoise with a bullseye) video index is to the right of the video window, in alphabetical order.

          There’s far too much emphasis on you “i” and less on THEM “you”.

          Your first 2 sentences of your summary are the MOST important.

          How about you ask 3 POWERFUL pain point questions your clients struggle with.

          What are their pain points? “Tired of _____” “Want _______ but CANT?” “Are you ______?” THEN, after you list pain points, say HOW you can help them and WHAT exactly you do to help them achieve that.

          Also, your paragraphs are a bit chunky and need better organization. (check out the examples I provided and look at the format which you can copy)

          https://www.linkedin.com/in/jennifer-harris-aa0487119/
          https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/

          You want to provide information that is:

          Telling your readers WHO you work with, HOW you help them and WHY they should work with you. It’s nice to educate them but not throughout the entire profile.

          Call To Action:

          You need a better one

          If you’re ready for _______ then message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

          Please tag me in your revision!! 🙂

        • #32822

          Jeanette Llabre
          Participant
            @jeanettellabre@gmail.com

            Hi @negeen-dargahi

            Please review my revised profile

            https://www.linkedin.com/in/jeanettellabre/

            Thank you

             

          • #32846

            n d
            Keymaster
              @negeen@coredm.com

              Hi @jeanette-llabre – your profile looks FANTASTIC!!! Super proud of you implementing my feedback 🙂

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