Infomercial – review draft

[judy cooper cooper]

I buy problem houses from people that are wanting an EASY – QUICK solution. 

Are you looking for an EASY solution to your housing problem? Or do you know of someone who has a house in need of major repairs, tax delinquent, roof, foundation issues?

Perhaps getting a divorce or in bankruptcy. These obstacles are overbearing to the homeowner who wonders what can they do?  They just want to sell it easily & quickly. So how can they do that?

To find out  Message me! Or call 503-897-0026

[n d]

Hi @judy-cooper-2, so you’re listing a lot of stuff that you help out with which is thus making your message lost.

Try following this outline to best get your message across:

I want you to come up with 3 powerful pain point questions that have to do with what your services are.

(after you ask 3 questions)

If this sounds like you… I know EXACTLY how to help.

Hi, I’m _______ and I am a ____________ helping clients with _________.

(2-4 sentences saying HOW exactly you plan to help — which you have great sentences above that can go right here)

(motivating 1 liner)

If you’re wanting _______________ then message or call me TODAY at _________ to see if we’re a good fit.

 

[judy cooper cooper]

PLEASE REVIEW!

I sent a re-write a week ago and haven’t heard back!!! I can’t move forward without doing the infomercial. I am unable to do the infomercial until I get the go-ahead on the script for the infomercial.

 

HERE IT IS:

 

Want to STOP wasting your free time on the never-ending repair list?

Wanting a PAINLESS quick sale but don’t know anyone who can help?

Are you experiencing a high level of WORRY just thinking about selling your house in its present condition?

These thoughts can be overbearing!

 

If this sounds like you. Then I know EXACTLY how to help.

 

Hi, I’m Judy Cooper and I purchase “problem” houses from clients who just simply want their problem to go AWAY! I make it FAST & EASY for you to turn your property into cash.

 

– NO need to do any repairs!

– NO waiting for offers!

-NO commissions or fees!

Your life won’t get better by chance. It gets better by choice.

So put that worry behind you, get your cash and move on!

If you’re wanting to find out how easy it is message me or call me TODAY at 503-897-0026 to see if we’re a good fit.

 

[n d]

Hi @judy-cooper-2, did you post your rewrite in the forum? I never saw it until you made this post right now. Sorry about the confusion.

Below is my feedback:

GOOD questions, they just need to be moved around so people immediately know you’re talking about selling a home.

Are you experiencing a high level of WORRY just thinking about selling your house in its present condition?

READY to STOP wasting your free time on the never-ending home repair list?

Are you wanting a PAINLESS quick sale but don’t know anyone who can help?

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Love it, really great job! Short, sweet and straight to the point! Looking forward to seeing this recorded.

 

 

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