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    • #33016

      Donna Harris
      Participant
        @donna@donnahomes.com

        Do you like to entertain, but CAN’T because you’re packed in your home like sardines?

        Are your kids SICK of sharing 1 bathroom?

        TIRED of parking in the driveway, but can’t fit your car in the garage?

        Did you just cringe at each of these questions?

        Let me help YOU sell your non-functioning house while putting an extra $13k in your pocket!

        You heard that right!

        My listings sell faster AND at a higher % of asking price with 32% of my listing selling in multiple offers.

        With the right marketing tailored to your property’s individual needs, you’ll get top dollar too!

        WHEN YOU WORK WITH ME, You will work DIRECTLY with me.

        Contact me today to get your house sold tomorrow!

        @negeen-dargahi

      • #33023

        Halle Eavelyn
        Moderator
          @halle@coredm.com

          Hey, @donna-harris, great job taking Massive Imperfect Action!!

          May I ask why $13K? Because I think you’re extrapolating from a single example, but it makes it sound like you’re giving them $13K no matter what.  So you need to reword that.

          Also, how about “did you cringe at at least one of these questions?”

          Before you close, let’s try:

          With the right marketing tailored to your property’s individual needs, you’ll get top dollar too!

          WHEN YOU WORK WITH ME, You will work DIRECTLY with me.

          If you’re ready to have plenty of space, and really be able to enjoy your home, get started now!

          Contact me today to get your house sold tomorrow!

        • #33028

          Donna Harris
          Participant
            @donna@donnahomes.com

            Hi @halle-eavelyn

            The $13k is a calculated number from MY average sales price to asking price and the average Austin sales price to asking price difference. Should I just change the number to “CASH”?

            I like the other changes, it just takes it to closer to 45 seconds, and I was trying to bare-bones the ending because of time…

             

          • #33035

            Halle Eavelyn
            Moderator
              @halle@coredm.com

              You could say, “an average of $13,000 more in your pocket!” I like that.  Specific numbers are GREAT for credibility, so if you know it’s $13,752, that’s even better.

               

              No worries – you are WAY under the real time guideline (less than 2 min is perfect!!)

              Way to go, @donna-harris

            • #33044

              Donna Harris
              Participant
                @donna@donnahomes.com

                I’ll create the video over the weekend… but need to mark it as complete in order to move to the next module…

              • #33248

                Donna Harris
                Participant
                  @donna@donnahomes.com

                  Here’s round 1. I need eye makeup as I look washed out… I couldn’t get it under a minute, but feel I was rushing thru.

                   

                  @halle-eavelyn

                  • #33389

                    n d
                    Keymaster
                      @negeen@coredm.com

                      Hi @donna-harris! First off, you did a really great job filming your first infomercial! I really liked that you were in front of a house.

                      Okay, so because the camera is at an angle, it is causing you to look down at your viewers and also can be an unflattering angle.

                      To fix this, have the camera at eye level.

                      Try to also be somewhat more in the frame. You’re a bit too far off on the left side where part of you is cut off.

                      Lastly, if you feel rushed, take a breath! We just don’t want it going over 2 minutes!

                      Overall, super proud of you for taking action and I look forward to your revised video 🙂

                  • #33250

                    Donna Harris
                    Participant
                      @donna@donnahomes.com

                      And wow, that shirt makes me look fat…

                    • #33386

                      Donna Harris
                      Participant
                        @donna@donnahomes.com

                        @negeen-dargahi  @halle-eavelyn  I haven’t received a review on the content yet, so just tagging you again. I know I need to get the tripod higher as I’m looking down at it (making my chins look fat) and wear a more flattering shirt…

                      • #33863

                        Donna Harris
                        Participant
                          @donna@donnahomes.com

                          Is there a way to take the wind sound out?

                          https://youtu.be/RaLMc-FFYyc

                          @negeen-dargahi

                          @halle-eavelyn

                        • #33916

                          n d
                          Keymaster
                            @negeen@coredm.com

                            Hi @donna-harris – I reviewed your first infomercial on March 5th, right above your message (in this thread). I will paste it down below for you to read:

                            Hi @donna-harris! First off, you did a really great job filming your first infomercial! I really liked that you were in front of a house.

                            Okay, so because the camera is at an angle, it is causing you to look down at your viewers and also can be an unflattering angle.

                            To fix this, have the camera at eye level.

                            Try to also be somewhat more in the frame. You’re a bit too far off on the left side where part of you is cut off.

                            Lastly, if you feel rushed, take a breath! We just don’t want it going over 2 minutes!

                            Overall, super proud of you for taking action and I look forward to your revised video.

                            I will also take a look at the video your refilmed and provide my feedback on that shortly.

                            Thank you!

                             

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