Infomercial Review

[Lily Rosenfield]

@negeen-dargahi @kent-littlejohn

I just completed my infomercial.  Could I please get your feedback?

Thank you.   https://www.linkedin.com/in/lily-rosenfield-41999981

Do you want your Next Deal to be Stress Free?

Realizing that the sale of your property and the purchase of another are probably the most important

activities you will engage in this year.  I will make it easy and painless!  My expert advice on Pricing

and Staging will set you apart from ANY competition.  The Keyes Company is the #1 Luxury Real Estate Company in Sales and Volume in Florida with a dedicated mortgage, title, insurance and property management company ready and able to step in at any point of the transaction.  My knowledge of the Country Club Communities in the area is second to none.

Call me and let’s chat.

[n d]

Hey @lily-rosenfield! Nice work taking action 🙂

Instead, I want you to ask 3 powerful pain point questions your clients face before working with you and in the whole process. What are they not wanting to deal with? Be specific but keep it short and sweet.

Then, after your ask 3 pain point questions, I want you to introduce yourself and what you do.

Then, after that, I want you to write 3-5 sentences stating exactly how you intend on serving your clients.

Call to action needs to be better. “Call me and let’s chat.” isn’t going to help. How about this:

If you’re wanting _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

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