Infomercial Draft Review

[Sandra Thigpen]

@negeen-dargahi, here is my draft of my 30 second infomercial. I’m afraid it went to 60 sec. Help! Thanks!

<p dir=”ltr”>Infomercial Script:</p>
<p dir=”ltr”>If you’re viewing this video, you’ve probably already read my summary page on LinkedIn.</p>
<p dir=”ltr”>If you’re like a lot of home owners who are trying to decide what real estate agent to trust to help you sell your home for top dollar with little to no stress, then look no further.</p>
<p dir=”ltr”>Hi, I’m Sandra Thigpen, and I’m here to save the day for you. (LOL, I had to put that quote in being a superhero fan)!</p>
<p dir=”ltr”>But back to business…. But if you think we could be a good fit to work together, give me a call at 757-719-2622 and let’s talk about what you need in a real estate agent. Thanks for listening. Bye for now!</p>

Sandi Thigpen

[n d]

Hi @sandra-thigpen-2!

Nice work taking action!

Don’t worry on time – the absolute max, I’d say, is 1min 30sec.

Now, I’d like you to follow this outline to be better organized for your video AND to also provide some more content. I don’t want you to start the video off assuming they read your summary because some may not have.

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Same as your LI, how about you start off asking up to 3 POWERFUL pain point questions…

(after you ask 3 questions)

If this sounds like you… I know EXACTLY how to help.

Hi, I’m _______ and I am a ____________ helping clients with _________.

(2-5 sentences saying HOW exactly you plan to help — which you have great sentences above that can go right here)

(motivating 1 liner)

If you’re wanting _______________ then message or call me TODAY at _________ to see if we’re a good fit.

 

[Sandra Thigpen]

Hi @negeen-dargahi,

Here is my revised infomercial Script after making the changes you suggested. Thanks.

• Are you feeling anxious about the home you want  to sell?

<!–more–>
<p dir=”ltr”>Want to travel but don’t want the hassles of maintaining a large house?</p>
<p dir=”ltr”>Or have you had a major life event (retirement, divorce, death, new baby)?</p>
<p dir=”ltr”>If this sounds like you… I know EXACTLY how to help.</p>
<p dir=”ltr”>Hi, I’m Sandra Thigpen, and I am a real estate consultant helping clients with one of the most stressful events in their lives….selling a home.</p>
<p dir=”ltr”>If you’re like a lot of home owners trying to decide what real estate agent to trust in helping you to sell your home for top dollar with little to no stress, then look no further!</p>
<p dir=”ltr”>I’m your superhero to the rescue! 😊</p>
<p dir=”ltr”>If you’re wanting service that’s all about you, then message or call me TODAY at 757-719-2622 to see if we’re a good fit.</p>
 

[n d]

Hi @sandra-thigpen-2, so much better!

When you say:

“Or have you had a major life event (retirement, divorce, death, new baby)?”

I want you to say:

“Or have you had a major life event such as a retirement, divorce, death, new baby… you name it!”

Everything else looks great, nice work @sandra-thigpen-2 !!

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