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INFOMERCIAL…INFORMERCIAL
Are you wanting to live the American Dream?
Do you need to own your own home?
Want to get rid of the stress and fear that you are feeling?
If you answered “yes” to these three questions you have come to the right place!
I am Shirley Morris…. the people realtor– My goal is to make this process fun for you.
You will be informed of the entire transaction process
You will give me all the details about your first home . The American Dream!
Your stress will be gone because I will search for homes for you
You will select those you want to see
Showing arrangements will be made for you
You meet me at the homes of your choice
You make an offer I do all the paperwork
Transaction closes – you get the Keys
You move in to your new home! The Dream has come true. Congratulations
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Hi @shirley-morris! This is a really nice start!
I don’t like your Q1. It’s way too generic and not enough of a pain point. I also don’t like that you have a lot of “You will”. Try to form full sentences as if you’re talking to someone because you will be recording yourself.
Below is an outline to help you:
How about you start off asking up to 3 POWERFUL pain point questions…
Are you WANTING _________?
Do you NEED __________?Want __________?
(after you ask 3 questions)
If you answered ‘YES’ to those questions, you came to the right place!
Hi, I’m _______ and I am a ____________ helping clients with _________.
(2-5 sentences saying HOW exactly you plan to help / how you serve your clients)
(you can add 1-2 more sentences about why they should work with you or maybe a motivating 1 liner to get them excited)
If you want _______________ then message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit.
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INFOMERCIAL
Are you wanting to stop paying rent monthly with no financial benefits in return?
Do you want to own your own home?
Want to get rid of the stress and fear that you feel ?
Do you need to know how money is obtained for a home purchase?
If you answered “Yes” to those questions you came to the right place
Hi, I’m Shirley Morris and I am a Realtor helping clients overcome the stress and fear they feel about homeownership.
In our first meeting we will discuss financing the home, locating available homes, and the home selection process.
I will review with you all the required paperwork which I complete on your behalf.
My time is your time! I work for you!
Call me #7037129545 Shirley Morris.. ”Let’s make that move together”.
Please review..Thanks
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Hi @shirley-morris, nice job revising. Below is my feedback:
Your first question needs to be worded better… how about:
Are you TIRED of paying rent monthly and not getting any financial benefits in return?
Your second question is too obvious. How about:
Are you finally READY to own your own home?
Lastly, you have 2 other questions. Let’s just keep it to 3 pain point questions, not 4 or it will be too many.
Your last question needs to be re-worded as:
Want to get rid of the additional stress and fear that you have about home buying?
Everything else looks good.
You could always add something like:
“When you work with me, you get an experienced realtor who can help you _________”
^ do you help with paperwork, etc.
Everything else looks good!
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INFOMERCIAL
Are you wanting to stop paying rent monthly with no financial benefits in return?
Do you want to own your own home?
Want to get rid of the stress and fear that you feel?
If you answered “Yes” to those questions you came to the right place.
Hi, I’m Shirley Morris and I am a realtor helping clients overcome the stress and fear they feel about homeownership.
In our first meeting we will discuss financing the home, locating available homes, and the home selection process.
When you work with me you get an experienced realtor who helps with all of the paperwork.
My time is your time! I work for you!
Call me #7037129545 Shirley Morris. “Let’s make that move together”
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