Help with Headline

[Laura Barker]

@negeen-dargahi  @halle-eavelyn Please help me with my headline for LI.  Somehow the one I had has changed. If I did it, (and I guess I did) it was totally by mistake and worse, I don’t know when it changed! I just noticed tonight that it is about as blase as a statement can be! So, I’ve come up with some options but feel sort of lost on this. I am thinking I might want to focus on Identity Theft because it is really a pain point for companies across the board.

Thanks in advance!!

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[n d]

Hi @laura-barker!

No problem – happy to help!

I liked:

Want Added Value for the Company and Your Employees at no cost to the Company?  Msg Me Today for Your Unique Proposal

Or how about this one:

🚨 ALERT: 24,657 Identities were STOLEN Yesterday! Want A Unique Proposal To Keep You SAFE? 👉MSG Me

 

 

[Laura Barker]

@negeen-dargahi thanks! just wondering where you got the identity theft headline w/ the numbers?

 

L

[n d]

@laura-barker, Kent actually made that for someone in your field and he just looked it up.

I’m not too crazy about “Data Aggregator Breach”

I like what you have but I’m not in love with it. It’s a bit of a mouthful.

What is going to really worry someone enough to click and help themselves and their business?

[Laura Barker]

@negeen-dargahi

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If you like this one, Can you find some icons to spice this up?

[Laura Barker]

@negeen-dargahi  that’s funny that Kent made up the idt headline! I know it was from David Youngman (I often talk w/ his wife, Kat and him).  I had stolen his headline for one of my associates! However, it doesn’t really fit for my target audiences of

1. insurance agents/brokers
2. Company owners/HR directors

I’m really struggling to put their pain points into a headline.  They have very different interests.

These are some things that concern the insurance folks:

• independent agents getting into “their” accounts and cutting them out of a commission potential
• failing to offer the right benefits vs offering too many benefits to their clients
• participation is going to drop because of the ultra-high cost of medical insurance

 

These are some things that concern the company owners and HR folks:

• Attracting and retaining good employees is a challenge bc it is an employee’s market
• Bottom line being hurt by rising healthcare costs
• benefits are too expensive to fool with and e’ees won’t even participate in things like 401k even when there is e’er match!
• are they fostering a good company culture?
• they may not know it yet but when their key employee(s) have their identities actually stolen and used for bad purposes, those e’ees will be missing work and ultra-stressed!

I have this information but I just can’t seem to pull it together in a headline.  Any suggestions would be warmly welcomed!

Laura

 

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