Glo's rvised hero story

[Glo reber]

Hi,

Here is my revised hero story for review.  Lots to think through!!

@halle-eavelyn   @negeen-dargahi

Thank you!!

Glo

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[n d]

Hi @glo-reber, thank you – I’ve notified @halle-eavelyn!

[Halle Eavelyn]

Much better – I still feel like you are missing some important opportunities to connect with people, when you DON’T gloss over some of those emotional moments – some are in now, which is great!  But please review the areas where you opted not to make changes, and reconsider.  Even a few sentences can really make a difference. The PAUSES can become more dramatic because of the breezy parts in between. If EVERYTHING is breezy, it makes for less powerful pacing,

@glo-reber

[Glo reber]

Hi,

Here is my revision #2.  I can’t attend tomorrow’s call, but I wanted to get this forwarded!

My intent for next week is to get the slides drafted for the webinar.

@halle-eavelyn

@negeen-dargahi

Thank you for your comments!!

Glo

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[n d]

Hi, @glo-reber, I’m going to tag in @halle-eavelyn.

She usually does not provide feedback after the first revision but I’m going to tag her anyways to see if this still applies.

Thank you 🙂

[Glo reber]

Great!  Thanks so much!

Glo

[Glo reber]

Hi Negeen,

Should I go ahead and post my hero story (changing the title, of course)?

If I need to add more editing I could do that later, right?  Also, should I separate lines fr more emphasis?

Should I add pictures too?

Thanks!

Glo

@negeen-dargahi

 

 

[n d]

Hi, @glo-reber!!

YES, you can absolutely post your hero story once you feel it is complete AND yes, you can make changes in the future!

Yes, if you have very chunky paragraphs, it’s always beneficial to break them up as much as possible. I would refer to Kent and Anthony’s hero stories when it comes to how their stories are formatted.

Pictures are always a great touch – add them in a tasteful manner.

Tagging in @halle-eavelyn in case she has feedback on your questions!

 

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