First Profile Review – Ann Dempsey

[Ann Dempsey]

https://www.linkedin.com/in/ann-dempsey-1087b8177/

I welcome any help and advice!! Ann Dempsey

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HI @ann-dempsey! Nice job taking massive imperfeCT action on your profile!

I’d like you to go back and look over the lesson – there are a good bit of changes I’d like you to make:

Profile Photo:

Looks GREAT!

Background Photo:

You also need a background photo (the rectangular blue space behind your profile photo). I want you to email our graphic designer and tell her a little about your field of business and she can create something for you to use!

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline (words under your name):

You’ve got a great start on your headline. I just reformatted it to look better. You can redo this if you’d like:

Want To BUY Property In Beautiful Coastal Georgia WITHOUT Overpaying?☆ EXPERT Realtor Helping Clients In Georgia☆☞ Message Me!

Summary:

Please make sure you watch Halle’s video called: “BENEFITS MARKETING and BENEFITS MARKETING II videos in the Transformational Business Strategy module (bottom middle module on your MAIN DASHBOARD – turquoise with a bullseye) video index is to the right of the video window, in alphabetical order.

There’s too much emphasis on you and not enough on them.

Your first 2 sentences of your summary are the MOST important.

How about you ask 3 POWERFUL pain point questions your clients struggle with.

What are their pain points? “Tired of _____” “Want _______ but CANT?” “Are you ______?” THEN, after you list pain points, say HOW you can help them and WHAT exactly you do to help them achieve that.

Also, your paragraphs are a bit chunky and need better organization. (check out the examples I provided and look at the format which you can copy)

https://www.linkedin.com/in/jennifer-harris-aa0487119/
https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/

You want to provide information that is:

Telling your readers WHO you work with, HOW you help them and WHY they should work with you. It’s nice to educate them but not throughout the entire profile.

Call To Action:

You need a better one. Be alpha rather than saying “feel free”.

“If you’re READY for _______ then message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

Please tag me in your revision!! 🙂

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