Draft for Infomercial Review

[Su Swanne]

Please review and comment on that attached Infomercial script.

Thank you so much!

30-Second-Infomercial-Trial-1

Su

 

 

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[n d]

This looks really great, @susan-swanne!!

My only feedback is the sentence below. It is a run-on sentence.

I’ve fixed it below (revise if needed):

What’s better?

With my RESOURCE TEAM…which includes Estate Sales, Moving Manager/Mover, Elder Law Attorney, CPA, and others, I provide added value you can’t find anywhere else!

I understand Senior concerns such as selling a much-loved home, long-time home and the worries about moving into a Senior Retirement Community.

Next:

After you make those changes, you are ready to film!!

 

 

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