Brenda Roach Profile

[Brenda Roach]

Please review my LINKEDIN Profile, https://www.linkedin.com/in/brenda-roach-aa2973149/

[n d]

Hi @brenda-roach!

I am unable to see your summary section. Please make sure that in your privacy settings under ‘visibility’ it is set to ‘public’ so I can provide you with full feedback.

Thank you 🙂

 

[Brenda Roach]

Negeen,

I think I changed it. Let me know if you still can’t access it.

Thanks,

Brenda

[n d]

Hi @brenda-roach – darn, I still don’t see it. Did you go into your privacy settings and make sure that your summary is set to ‘public’?

Let me know!

cc: @matt-barcus

 

 

 

[Brenda Roach]

Ok, Negeen, it was operator head space. please review my LinkeIn profile.

[n d]

Hi @brenda-roach, okay THERE WE GO! 🙂 Below is my feedback:

Profile Photo: You look great but it could be of higher quality. Do you have any other photos you could set as your profile photo so it’s not as grainy?

You also need a background photo (the rectangular blue space behind your profile photo). I want you to email our graphic designer and tell her a little about your field of business and she can create something for you to use!

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline:

LOVE IT. This looks super!

Summary:

Please make sure you watch Halle’s video called: “BENEFITS MARKETING and BENEFITS MARKETING II videos in the Transformational Business Strategy module (bottom middle module on your MAIN DASHBOARD – turquoise with a bullseye) video index is to the right of the video window, in alphabetical order.

Your first 2 sentences of your summary are the MOST important.

How about you ask 3 POWERFUL pain point questions your clients struggle with.

What are their pain points? “Tired of _____” “Want _______ but CANT?” “Are you ______?” THEN, after you list pain points, say HOW you can help them and WHAT exactly you do to help them achieve that.

Also, your paragraphs are a bit chunky and need better organization. (check out the examples I provided and look at the format which you can copy)

https://www.linkedin.com/in/jennifer-harris-aa0487119/
https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/

You want to provide information that is:

Telling your readers WHO you work with, HOW you help them and WHY they should work with you. It’s nice to educate them but not throughout the entire profile.

Call To Action:

You need one!

“If you’re ready for _______ then message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

Please tag me in your revision!! 🙂

 

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