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Hello @halle-eavelyn, @amanda-hendrickson
Can you please give me feedback on this for my script for the 30 second infomercial script?
I hope to turn it in by Friday so that I can record it next week at the summit!
Thanks
Bre
How would you like to invest your hard earned money without being fearful of the stock market rollercoaster, while eliminating the risk to your retirement income?
That is exactly what we can do for you. You can realize equity while supplying long-term, consistent cash flow in a safe & secure system with high rates of returns and excellent tax benefits.
You partner with us to place your money in real, tangible assets, such as single family homes. This is all with no further effort on your part after set up, and you get to collect mailbox money and reap the tax benefits.
You’ll get a smart solution to problems you might not even know you have yet.
Send me a message or call us at 520-333-5665 to see if we’re a good fit to work together.
Thank you for your time and I look forward to your call or text
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@Hi @bre-zientarski!
Yes, let’s get this done by Friday so we can film at Summit!
Few things:
I see you’ve included pain points first which is GREAT, but let’s make them 3 separate pain point questions, like on your LinkedIn profile.
And you also need to introduce yourself.
Re-organize your infomercial by filling out this template.
This will really help get your message across in a powerful way.
Are you WANTING _________?
Do you NEED __________?Want __________?
If you answered ‘YES’ to those questions, you came to the right place!
Hi, I’m _______ and I am a ____________ helping clients _________.
(2-5 sentences saying HOW exactly you plan to help / how you serve your clients)
(you can add 1-2 more sentences about why they should work with you or maybe a motivating 1 liner to get them excited)
If you want _______________ then message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit.
TAG ME IN YOUR REVISION
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Hi @halle-eavelyn, @amanda-hendrickson
@amanda-hendrickson, Thank you for your quick reply!
Here is another draft:
How would you like to invest your hard earned money without being fearful of the stock market rollercoaster?
Are you disappointed with your rates of returns in your current investments?
Are you wanting to diversify or get away from the stock market completely, while eliminating the risk to your retirement income?
If you answered “Yes” to those questions, you came to the right place!
That is exactly what we can do for you. You can realize equity while supplying long-term, consistent cash flow in a safe & secure system with high rates of returns and excellent tax benefits.
Hi, I’m Bre Zientarski and I am a private equity consultant helping clients successfully and securely acquire a portfolio of properties for long term cash flow.
You partner with us to place your money in a real, tangible asset, such as single family homes. This is all with no further effort on your part after set up, and you get to collect mailbox money and reap the tax benefits, as we are owner managers of the properties working hard for and with you.
You’ll get a smart solution to problems you might not even know you have yet.
Send me a message or call us at 520-333-5665 to see if we’re a good fit to work together.
Thank you for your time and I look forward to working with you!
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@Nice job @bre-zientarski!
I moved one line down to the end and changed some wording so it made more sense grammatically.
“How would you like to invest your hard earned money without being fearful of the stock market rollercoaster?
Are you disappointed with your rates of returns in your current investments?
Are you wanting to diversify or get away from the stock market completely, while eliminating the risk to your retirement income?
If you answered “Yes” to those questions, you came to the right place!
Hi, I’m Bre Zientarski and I am a private equity consultant helping clients successfully and securely acquire a portfolio of properties for long-term cash flow.
You partner with us to place your money in a real, tangible asset, such as single family homes. This is all with no further effort on your part after set up. Plus you get to collect mailbox money and reap the tax benefits, as we are owner managers of the properties working hard for and with you.
You’ll get a smart solution to problems you didn’t even know you had.
You CAN realize equity while supplying long-term, consistent cash flow in a safe & secure system with high rates of returns and excellent tax benefits.
To find out more, send me a message or call us at 520-333-5665 to see if we’re a good fit to work together.”
Now all you need to do is put this in a word document and send it over to summit@coredm.com!
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