Hi @christine-basham! You submitted in the correct spot, yay!

First off, nice job taking massive imperfect action on your profile! Few things:

Your profile photo is not supposed to feature your entire body; find a nice photo of your face so people can clearly see who you are. If you need any help with images like your cover photo, you can email our graphic designer and can help you with that. She has lots of great cover photos of realtors —> Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline is on the right path but I don’t like ‘MESSAGE ME NOW!!!”
You want to remain alpha.

How about this —->
Want _______ WITHOUT _______?☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients In [LOCATION]☆☞</span>MSG Me!
(120 character limit ^)

Summary:

Okay so I love the content that you have but it’s one HUGE paragraph. Please refer to these 2 profile examples below:
https://www.linkedin.com/in/jennifer-harris-aa0487119/
https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/

I want you to instead start your summary off asking 3 pain point questions.
then go to
1 sentence what you do.
I am a _________ helping clients with ________ in [LOCATIONS]
HOW you can help
Call to action:
If you want ___________, then give me a call today at _________ to see if we’re a good fit!

• This reply was modified 6 years, 5 months ago by n d.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/mark-gibbon-959bb450/

Please review and give suggestions

Hey @mark-gibbon! Nice work taking massive imperfect action on your profile! Below is my feedback:

I really like your cover photo! Very informative.

Great profile photo! Can you email your picture to our graphic designer and have her add in a white background for you —>
Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline (words under your name) — this needs work and I’d like to you fill this out and add it to that location:
Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞MSG Me!
Summary:

(examples below)
https://www.linkedin.com/in/jennifer-harris-aa0487119/
https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/

You don’t really have enough information and I’d like you to refer to those examples of what we want your profile to look like!

Outline of summary you can follow and fill in:

Your first 2 sentences of your summary are the MOST important. How about you list 3 questions your clients struggle with. What are their pain points? “Tired of _____” “Want _______ but CANT?” “Are you ______?”

• THEN, after you list pain points, say HOW you can help them and WHAT exactly you do to help them achieve that.

2 sentences how are you different than your competitors

Who you like to work with

Then add a call to action with your contact info:

If you’re wanting _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______to see if we’re a good fit!

Negeen – I added a few more things – wanna check again?

Thanks,

Mark

Hi @mark-gibbon, I really don’t see your profile being complete.

Please look at this example below. You NEED to have a LOT more information in your summary. You just aren’t providing nearly enough information for someone to want to work with you. If you need to copy the outline below, please do so. I need you to implement my feedback. Thanks!

https://www.linkedin.com/in/marcustexada/