Hey @jason-pan, I really like where your infomercial is going!!

So, I want you to think of it as a condensed version of your LI profile.

Choose 3 POWERFUL short and sweet questions, like you have above but really empathize with your audience. And pick 3.

Then you can say your line —>

“If you answered yes to any one of these questions I have solutions for you. Hi, I’m @jason-pan and I am a ______ helping clients ______.

(I want you to write 3-5 sentences on how you serve them)

Call to action which you NEED —->

If you’re wanting _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______or you can message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

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Hi @ann-lovett-baird!

Good start on your infomercial!

I really like your question but I would stick to only 3 pain point questions and then I would introduce yourself and what your title is.

If you can provide 2-3 more sentences, that would be great and then add a strong call to action: “If you’re ready for _____” and then add in your contact info similar to what you did!

Really nice work!

@negeen-dargahi

This will take me about 1.5 minutes to get through, I believe. But I don’t know how to shorten it more without weakening the message. Is this okay to move ahead with or do you have suggestions?

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@michelle-dumas No worries if it goes over. 2min is the ABSOLUTE max. I love the content you added but I want you to follow this outline. There are just too many questions you are asking and I still don’t know who you are and what you do.

Ask 3 pain point questions (short and sweet)

If this sounds like things you need help with… you came to the right person! I know exactly how to help!

Hi, I’m @michelle-dumas and I am a _____ helping clients _______.

3-6 sentences explaining exactly HOW you will help them/serve them.

Call to action:

If you’re wanting _____ and ready for ______…then call me TODAY at ______ or message me here on LI to see if we’re a good fit!

Hey @jason-pan! Don’t worry about time, just make sure it doesn’t exceed 2min! That is the absolute MAX.

Now, everything looks awesome! Feel free to elaborate more or write more on #4.

Great call to action!!!

I sent you a new draft of infomercial and have not heard from you.  I am not able to open up any messages you are sending me.  Please advise.

@negeen-dargahi @kent-littlejohn

Should I send it again?

https://www.linkedin.com/in/lily-rosenfield-41999981

@lily-rosenfield please check your notifications and click on the message that I tagged you in. I also tagged you in my feedback on Facebook. I will try to tag you again!