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@negeen-dargahi @kent-littlejohn
Negeen, you gave me some great feedback on my first draft LinkedIn profile and I made a few changes as a result. How does it look now?
Thank you
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It might help if I included the link 🙂 https://www.linkedin.com/in/michelledumas/
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Hi @michelle-dumas — excellent job implementing my feedback and your profile photo looks so much better!
I’m loving everything but some sections need to be moved around for maximum retention:
1. Can you bring those 3 (…are you) questions as the VERY TOP and THEN in the next paragraph, have your “As a professional and executive” — this is so your readers’ attention is grabbed initially and then you can further explain your point.
2. I want you to switch “who am I” with the paragraph “what you can expect from me” — this is so you keep it about THEM and then towards the end, you can chat about yourself a bit
Does that make sense?? GREAT WORK overall and nice job tagging me!! Woohoo!
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