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Hello,
This is my first profile submission for review. I appreciate any feedback you deem necessary. Thanks for taking the time to review.
http://www.linkedin.com/in/joannbrothers
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Hi @joann-brothers, wonderful to have you here in the program with us! Below are my comments on your profile:
Your profile photo is lovely!! I’d like you to email that photo to our graphic designer, Lindsey, and please request she brighten the photo a little bit and add a white background for you. This will really help the photo pop.
You also need a better background banner image behind your profile photo. Please also email Lindsey, what your field of work is in and she will create something custom for you.
Headline (words under name):
What you currently have written is “The “KEY” Connection to Your Next Home” BUT based on the teachings in the program, your headline is the best piece of real estate. Let’s really make it POP! Think back on your Perfect Client exercise* How about filling out this template:
Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞Message Me!
Here is one example:
Want SEASIDE Living With RESORT Amenities? ☆ I’m An EXPERT Realtor Helping Clients In Hilton Head Island☆ ☞ Message me!
About Section:
I like how you’re starting off your sales letter by talking about how you help your clients! Love that. Try to break up those chunky paragraphs because it’s a little hard to read.
When someone clicks to view your profile, the first 2 sentences of your profile About/summary section are available for them until they have to click “see more”. That means, your first 2 sentences are very important.
Also, you HAVE all the content, it just needs to be better organized 🙂
When you get to the testimonials, keep them short and sweet. Up to 3 sentences for each, is enough.
Pro tip: go to Kent’s profile, copy his About section, and ADD your own information to it. His outline is what we teach in the program!
https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/
Here is what we look for in a profile:
https://www.linkedin.com/in/danielgagnonre/
Call to action should ONLY be at the very end and after testimonials:
If you’re ready for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!
Please tag me after you make the necessary revisions! 🙂
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Hi Nageen:
Thank you for your email and reviewing my profile. I have made the suggested changes you recommended and am in the process of sending Lindsey my picture, etc. to update as well, per your email.
Below is the new and improved version for your review. Looking forward to hearing back from you.
JoAnn
@halle-eavelyn @negeen-dargahi
http://www.linkedin.com/in/joannbrothers
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HI @joann-brothers, thank you for making those changes!!
Your headline still needs some work – I want you to plug in your headline into this template because what you have right now:
“THE PEOPLE’S AGENT!! “Experience to help sell their homes for the highest profits possible.”….. NHarrison”
is kind of loud and not organized.
Try this:
Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞Message Me!
Example and free to use:
Want Maximum PROFIT From Selling Your Home WITHOUT Stress?☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients In [LOCATION]☆☞ Message Me!
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Your first paragraph in your about section is okay – it doesn’t grip me. This first sentence I had to read back a few times:
The “KEY” Connection to Your Next Home!! Take the stress out of selling your home with one phone call, as this will be your last stop in your search for all your real estate needs. My ability to put clients first has been something that makes them feel at ease from the very first phone call!!
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How about starting off by asking them a pain point question and then diving into something like:
“When clients like YOU work with me, you can rest assured that you’re working with an experienced real estate agent! Selling a house can be one of your biggest life experiences – my understanding, patience, and communication through the entire process will guarantee you are in the loop 110% of the way!”
^ do you see how that flows a bit better?
I love the rest of your content. Feel free to look at the profile examples I provided in the previous feedback.
Other than that you are good to go 🙂
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Hi Negeen:
I have a question…… what do you mean when you say “YOUR MARKET” in my 4 real estate questions. Someone replied to me yesterday that they were from Tennessee. As a real estate agent, am I to be more customized with the questions to keep the connections in my area? Can you clarify?
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Hi Negeen:
Here is my latest version of the changes you recommended….. thanks
JoAnn
http://www.linkedin.com/in/joannbrothers
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Hi @joann-brothers, sorry I’m not seeing where I mentioned “your market”.
On your profile on LinkedIn, you left “______” before EXPERT. Make sure to fill that blank space in with Realtor. It will look like this:
Want Maximum PROFIT From Selling Your Home WITHOUT Stress?☆EXPERT Realtor Helping Clients In MARYLAND☆☞ Message Me!
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Your message looks good!! You need a stronger call to action – right now you have ” Call me at 443-987-4021 today!!!” and this need to grab them more.
Fill this out and paste that at the end of your message.
Call to action:
If you’re ready for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!
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