Hey @robert-telecky, wonderful to have you in the program with us! Below are my comments for revision:

Your profile photo is lovely! I believe it would look better with a different color background, how about white so it pops! If you email it to our graphic designer, Lindsey, she can add that for you. Her info is below.

You also need a better background banner image behind your profile photo. Right now, your profile photo is blocking the words and also the quality isn’t as sharp.

Please also email our graphic designer, Lindsey, what your field of work is in and she will create something custom for you.

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline (words under name):

What you have looks great!!

Here is one example of a headline:

Want SEASIDE Living With RESORT Amenities? ☆ I’m An EXPERT Realtor Helping Clients In Hilton Head Island☆ ☞ Message me!

About Section:

I like how you’re starting off your sales letter talking about how you help your clients.

When someone clicks to view your profile, the first 2 sentences of your profile About/summary section are available for them until they have to click “see more”. That means, your first 2 sentences are very important.

Also, you HAVE all the content, it just needs to be better organized 🙂 

Pro tip: go to Kent’s profile, copy his About section, and ADD your own information to it. His outline is what we teach in the program! This should really help you with removing those bullet points at the end and focusing on a powerful sales letter.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/

Here is what we look for in a profile:

https://www.linkedin.com/in/danielgagnonre/

Call to action:

If you’re ready for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

Please tag me after you make the necessary revisions! 🙂