Hi @andrew-kehoe, wonderful to have you here in the program with us! Happy to provide you with feedback, below:

Your profile photo is nice but I want you to have a photo with your eyes at camera level. Right now it’s angled in a way that you’re looking down. Do you have a photo of higher quality you could upload? Whenever you take or get a new photo, send it to Lindsey, our graphic designer, and have her add a white background to it.

Here is her email: Lindsey@coredm.com

You also need a better background banner image behind your profile photo – something better related to your business. Please also email Lindsey, what your field of work is and she will create something custom for you.

Lindsey@coredm.com

Headline (words under name):

What you currently have written is “Do you want to achieve financial balance and stop stressing out about money? I can help!” Its on the RIGHT page  BUT based on the teachings in the program, your headline is the best piece of real estate. Let’s really make it POP! Think back on your Perfect Client exercise* How about filling out this template:

Want _______ WITHOUT _______? ☆EXPERT _____ Helping Clients _____☆☞Message Me!

Here is one example:

Want SEASIDE Living With RESORT Amenities? ☆ I’m An EXPERT Realtor Helping Clients In Hilton Head Island☆ ☞ Message me!

About Section:

I like how you’re starting off your sales letter by asking a pain point question!

When someone clicks to view your profile, the first 2 sentences of your profile About/summary section are available for them until they have to click “see more”. That means, your first 2 sentences are very important.

Also, you HAVE some good content but it needs to be better organized because right now, there is a call to action in the middle of your sales letter…. and a HUGE chunky paragraph at the end that is very difficult to want to read.

Because you have some good content, let’s get it formatted in an efficient way to keep their attention the whole time.

Pro tip: go to Kent’s profile, copy his About section, and ADD your own information to it. His outline is what we teach in the program! This should really help you with removing those bullet points at the end and focusing on a powerful sales letter.

https://www.linkedin.com/in/klittlejohn/

Here is what we look for in a profile:

https://www.linkedin.com/in/danielgagnonre/

Call to action at the every end:

If you’re ready for _______ then give me a call TODAY at _______ or message me here on LinkedIn to see if we’re a good fit!

Please tag me after you make the necessary revisions! 🙂